The sun is shining bright for our fun filled day,
mom promised she'd take me to the park to play.
A special day together just us two girls,
running and playing feeding nuts to the squirrels.
While driving she gave me such a loving glance,
just maybe, I thought, this could be our big chance.
If she'd just realize I'm the child, she's the mother,
and I'm much too young to be ANYONE'S lover!!
Since dad walked out and sends no support,
mom looks to me to help hold down the fort.
she says to hang in there and just be tough,
and though I'm barely eight says I'm old enough.
Her hands on the wheel I notice them shaking,
my heart starts to sink and hurt like it's breaking.
A child sex slave, my innocence lost,
but mom needs her fix no matter the cost.
Back home up the stairs I'm starting to cry,
dressed in a halter and a skirt that's mid thigh.
Mom says stop those tears your makeup will run,
just close your eyes and pretend to have fun.
The light is low I hear a knock from outside,
desparately looking I find no place to hide.
The door slowly opens my heart starts to race,
I remind myself not to look at his face.
I'll never watch while in a child he takes pleasure,
I know he'll be punished by God with great measure.
Along with my mother for selling her child,
and a father who left for a taste of the wild.
This pain really bad I want so much to scream,
but instead close my eyes going straight to my dream.
To a world that is perfect with both mom and dad,
our family together whether happy or sad.
It's finally over I sit up in a daze,
mom staggers in with eyes glassy and glazed.
Once again promising it will happen no more,
she'll make things happy like they were before.
But she can't give back my innocence to me,
from these horrific nightmares she can't set me free.
You may think this poem is not too realistic,
Just do some research and be shocked by statistics.
Author notes
"Rainbows and stuff" I chose option 2.....
A contest entry
- rhyme.. by my savior-pedro.
650 points, ended June 11, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
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800 points, ended July 12, 2007, 39 entries
Honorable mention
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So Sad
Oh pretty much the same story I have. This is written so very well Toni. Oh that Pic just got me so bad. Then the poem is just brilliant on Child abuse. Then again your rhyme, rhythm and flow with emotions and story in your poem is excellent.
OH TONI I'M SO SORRY FOR YOUR PAIN AND SUFFERING!!!!!
Much Love Always
Your Sister
Kelle Marie
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Oh my how this hurts my heart! I am aware though of the harsh realities of children's innocence being stolen. It happens more than any of us would want to believe. This is very well written, and puts a very important topic out there. Denial solves nothing, and only by becoming aware of these horrible crimes against our precious little ones can we affect change. Blessings, Patty
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tears flowing, hert wrenching cookies tossing...
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This poem has a good flow to it. The dread and the fear that it portrays is really well done. It makes me angry wondering who are these people that would do something like that.
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Thank you for your entry
I know all to well that this is all to real in the world today. It is the awfullest thing in the world. To strip an innocent child of all her innocence and sense of security. Thank you for sharing.
Good luck, I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
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This is an interesting perception on child abuse. Usually the poems I read on here about abuse are in hind-sight and not from the child's perspective. It makes the rhyme more fitting for such a serious subject matter. Thanks for entering this.
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this is wondefully written thankds for sharing. It has a lot of emotion to go along with this truly sad story. Father llaeve all the time and the mother has to be both pasrents and pay bills and everything all at once and then we as mothers feel bad because it seems that there is never enough time in the day for all the things that need to be done nad time to spend with the kids.
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Unbeleivable
Oh Toni I'm so very sorry. I wish it were easier for us to chat. I can relate to your poem here on child abuse so much. My mother also was a huge problem, I didn't get to be a innocent child either or feel innocence anyway let alone even feeling like a child. I too was robbed. You have won many of awards as you should. Your poem is so informative, sad, and true. Your ryhme and flow amidst the pain is EXCELLENT I must say. You truly are a gifted poet. Much Love to you Kelle Marie, stavykm
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Reality check!
Truly strong message driving home the sad, miserable existence of children used in such an abusive, horrid way. Any form of abuse is intolerable and yet it is so important to remind people of their plight as I, like so many others, too often become cocooned in our nice, safe, little lives. Well done to you on winning your trophies for this most deserving write. Take care, Julie.
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sorry forgot to add my applause last time x x
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Wow!
very powerful write, i was engrossed. I have recently read a book about child abuse which shocked me, but a mother selling her child is just plain wrong. very well written and best of luck in the contest x x -
Emotional
this was very difficult for me to read, heart wrenching and that fact that it happens in this day and age is well, just plain wrong. You get the message across very well, it is a beautiful write, well done and best of luck in the contest.
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this is 100 pecent desrving of the gold. Very very well written.
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this was a very powerful and heartbreaking story. There was an episode of law and order on the other day about a child pornographer and teh gilr he bought and kept in a absement for hsi pleasures. This was even more sad, for a parent to do this to their child... this was a powerful write, thanks for entering my contest, sorry it'd taking me so long to judge.
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Wow, very interesting twist and the flow is great. It had me reading on wanting more.
(=, there are some phrases which i like, so let me highlight them to you. (=
"taste of the wild.
dressed in a halter and a skirt that's mid thigh"
(=. Good job
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wow this is really powerful and quite sad. I cried. Good job at getting the msg out!
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powerful and deep, realistic and crazy. you might have put a lot of work into this, this was done very well. this was great! good luck.
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wow Good write
this is so moving and horroible ...I feel and understand this childs remorse...it is love lost to highest standard...innocent taken for something that should be guarding her life with the jutmost love ...well writin and smooth read ...I understand why you recieved the silver ...tc and peace Katie
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this had me crying...it's so horrible, all the people who would sell their own daughter and the people who get pleasure from hurting a child...thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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*tears*
brings back memories..... i love this poem. thanx SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO much for adding it into my contest. it's sad, and yet wonderful...
amazing job!!
loves... *kitty*
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Wow. Don't feel bad as I say this, but you killed my day. Both with my memories, and my morals. Good poem.
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sad
oh my gosh that made me want to cry... i've also read another like this recently. it's called Harlequin Hopes. you should check it out if you can find it. any way good poem. sad poem. it really shows the crueler side of the world
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Powerfull
As a divorced father of 3 girls. I can only pray that things like what you have penned are happening less freely due to laws. But yes that does happen as you say. Any man, any father that could do that should be castrated and more. If you decide to read a poem of mine may I suggest..: Suppose They Know"
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Never again
This was so personal and deep to me, it was beautiful but I hated it at the same time. I hate it because I hate that people do this everyday. I'm honestly speechless and almost ready to lean over and die from the tears I wish I could cry.
I never want to read a poem such as this because it hurts too much. I have too many friends who have had experiences like that.
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convinced
i don't need to be convinced that this poem is realistic-it's so strong and beautiful that i would believe anything you told. this leaves me speechless and i can truthfully say that this is the best poem i have ever read and has more meaning than i believed anyone could express in 10 stanzas. BRAVO!
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shocking.
A vividly painted picture that just increases in horror as it progresses. I kept mentally avoiding the ultimate conclusion in absolute disbelief and yet knew deep down that these excretia of the human race exist and much more than we think. Explicitly real and one sense the incredible situation that you are in and of your dealing with by dreaming of nice things. I am shocked and rightly so and it was a good thing as it really hit home the truth to me.
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wow thats so devastating, you captured the real "nightmare" of child slavery, its sad, but it happens right under our noses, its a real issue, and u were brave to openly write about it, wonderful job.
agape-cynt
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You have done really well to bring out emotion in this poem. It's difficult to write about some one else because it's sometimes hard to fully empathise and imagine what they must feel. I thought you did this well. I like how it starts off with the girl and her mother going out doing child like things and how that changes.
"I'll never watch while in a child he takes pleasure,
I know he'll be punished by God with great measure.
Along with my mother for selling her child,
and a father who left for a taste of the wild."
To me this is the best part of the poem. It show vounerability. I like the mention of God too like a hopeless cry because there's nothing she can do but she hopes that there is someone there to punish them.
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this is a terrible story, way more penetrating than the best fiction because it is unfortunately reality to so many. your words are harsh, your “scenario” raw and cutting bleeding slices from those reading it, i believe you wished it as a goal and you achieved both artistically and factually.
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Bravo..I am speechless. You did this piece so well. Every line filled with emotion making the reader feel rage within. Sad days we live in when our children have become the slaves to disturbed individuals. The ones who use th em and and the ones who betray them. Thank you for sharing...god speed. Keep writing for you are the voice for many who cant speak and cant scream..who are lost among the dark depths of reality. Dawn
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Heart destroying
This is the kind of poem that I could never write because just thinking about it upsets me too much. This is a brave poem to write and every credit to you. Child slavery of all types should be stopped and children should have proper childhoods.
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Solemn
wow this is so sad and not hard to believe I have witnessed myself the tangled webs people weave. It is so hard for children to have a break when their parents never grew up with the morals and values that make this place a better place. I cry tears for our broken innocence. Too many unspokens we will never know I hope the numbers come to a halt and never grow. excellent write well written to the point the view is clear very sad and unfortunately very true for some children's reality. thanks for sharing.
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wooowww
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Tragic
I've seen the stats, the pictures, video clips...ugh! All too true and all to often. Good rhyme scheme and pretty even metre. This is a story telling poem and you have done well. The title is good, I don't think it needs the explanation. Your words are very clear
This story/poem starts out so sweetly, so appropriate for an 8 year old and then the horror begins to creep in. It's desgusting that the mother takes her out for "fun", taking advantage of the child's natural love when she knows all along what is planned. Very raw and powerful.
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Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thanks for all of the nice comments and the applaud. I was trying to turn the poem into a story , it was the only way I could express what I was trying to get across to the readers. I appreciate you reading and the input.........Toni
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Oh. This is such an incredibly sad write.
It was very hard to read. Child abuse is such a ugly subject and you just don't want to believe that such ugly things happen to children. It is all very sad and I think that you conveyed that well.
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Sad but true!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
First of all thanks for reading and commenting and the applaud. Yes it is an ugly topic to discuss, but I believe that all forms of child abuse continue because no one wants to believe this is such a common occurrance. But as you read the responses of this poem you can see that almost everyone responding could relate in some manner. That is really sad!!! Thanks again!!!!!!!!!!!!Toni
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That was very good. Its sad but its written well. Good Job.
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Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thanks for the comment and the applauds, I appreciate you taking the time to stop and read!!!!!!!!!!!
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I know this pain too and it will pass.
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This poem really hits close to home. A different circumstance, but I can really relate. The way you use the horrid act and put it into a drama filled poem is just on a level all its' own.
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Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This really saddens me to keep reading how many adults suffered some type of abuse at the hands of those whom they loved and trusted. But I am glad that it touches so many so deep to let themknow they were not alone in their circumstances.........Thanks again...........Toni
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So very touching...I'm in tears.
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Thanks!!!!!!!!!
Thank you for the applauds and comment. It is a touching subject anf if you would like to help you may write a poem of your own to bring awareness to this growing problem.....
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Very vivid imagery here in this deeply reaching write.My heart goes out to all abused children everywhere. Thank you for sharing and being their voice...excellent ...mal
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Thanks for the nice review and the applaud. All adults have the responsibilty to be a voice for those who have no voice...Thanks again...................
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That sucks
not the poem, but what happens over there, and probly some places hers as well. im sure this poem will touch many as well, hopefully one day it will end. great job on the poem, you did a great job on the choice of words and the flow as well.
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Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hi and Thanks for reading this,If there is one thing I hate it is for children to be hurting in any type of abuse. I hope this will touch the people who read it and bring awareness to this growing situation!!!!!!!!!!Thanks again
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Darling
I hold your head
as you still cry.
Your nightmares in bed
are the reason why.
My momma was slow.
and couldn't stop poppa
yet yours she knows
her wrongful touch matters.
Smoosh
Janet
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Thanks so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thanks for the applauds, I also signed the petition for stopping child slavery in Africa on line. Good luck to you may your heart heal and may God put a divine healing upon yourmind body and soul!!!!!God Bless You! You are a strong and brave lady!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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