All My Tomorrows
My yesterdays have vanished
To a place I cannot find
To a place of troubled air
That exists within my mind
Held for the truly vanquished
I give all my tomorrows…
Though, I’ve yet to speak,
Or re-think Your name
I need them not, it seem
So heavy are their sorrows
I lay them at the altar, now
On Erin’s distant shore
Where the periwinkle thistles
At a place we’d been before
But forgotten it, somehow
As I walk, wrapped still in sunrise
I can scarcely keep from weeping
All alone, the days I’ve known
Brings a sadness to my being
Sad reflection to my reprise
So I give tomorrows to You
You, I will not give a name
They are Yours, upon the altar
You that loved me without blame
You that knew I would not fool You
I’ll give You my tomorrows, just trade them for todays
May they take away Your sorrows… as we go our separate ways
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Well Written
May I point out the spelling for Alter s/b Altar as used in this poem. Lines 11 and 23. I think the entire poem is very heartfelt. It has sadness and beauty within the lines. The second stanza is very sad, not being able to think of or rethink of a person not even their name??? -
some would curse you for being so good LOL
as usually it is hard to say the right words to most of your writes so best for some like me to say nothing... @##$% ^&^%% *&*( %$% ^&^^^&*( but not me i dont curse .... lol -
Haunting
Bob,
This is an incredible write...there is so much sorrow felt within your words...it actually concerns me a bit as I am not used to seeing this from you.
Truly, there is not a word of this I don't love, even though it's sad. It speaks to me of a time when a relationship ends; it feels like the past wasn't real, and the future looks vast and empty. At the same time, it is a wish (almost a prayer) for the other person to find their own happiness. My take on it, anyway.
As always, I love the rhyme and form, and the flow matches the emotions of the write. It's just...Wow. Don't know what else I can say.
I will be bookmarking this one for sure.
I hope all is well with you...
Much love,
~J.
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true-blue-lies
Thanks so much for reading and liking, Bob
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Beautiful!
WOW - This piece is a winner! I didn't want this poem to end, it brought goose-bumps to my arms!! To have someone that loves this much is an incredible fantasty come true!!! Exchanging tomorrows for todays for someone else is so lovingly selfless - Excellent write, I look forward to reading more of the brothers' work here on AP!!!!Thank you for sharing... Take care
Rose
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trista
Your take on the sonnet is as straight as the thin line separating pain and pleasure. Thanks for reading and being the insightful you. Bob -
Rose of Ireland
Thank you, Rose, for liking my write. I shall read some of yours soon. Bob
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Very Good
Robert
Love the thought within this work in words at every level
So I give tomorrows to You
You, I will not give a name
They are Yours, upon the alter
You that loved me without blame
You that knew I would not fool You
Well said, Brother Rick
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endeavor4u
Rick,
Thanks for your encouragement, and, I'm pulling an all nighter to get the book formatted this weekend. Bob
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