Up and down and backwards
Little Man Runs.
leaving bubbles and mountains
and rivers behind.
there is a wind at his back and
rope on one knee.
that is the only thing
that stops him from being free.
what is the purpose of the lightning bolt lines?
and what of thoes insects chasing him from behind?
he has left me behind
and he has left you
what is there to say than
in a way his is no more.
I don't understand him
yet he came from my hand
there is nothing worth telling
about this sad little man.
Author notes
I use a freewrite to propt this then edited it later.
Please tell me what you think
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since when can a little man run? to where is he going? how fast? ANYWAY this was a good write a little man who runs and can think for us AMAZING thanks for sharing regards zaj
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yet he came from my hand
there is nothing worth telling
about this sad little man.
Humm I love its poetic depth and the feel of the wave of the rythem of the hidden impact of the scenario and that is the real beauty and the real strength of this poem leading us in the land of thoughts and leading us towards the world of intriguing flow of the sentiments which you tried to reveal through your
great penning here my friend..I love the man you have depicted here attracting me very deply well done and thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem here,..
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i love stile its varry difrent. grate job.
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This is great I'm glad you are writing again!
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