In a black mirror
i see your face
out of all error
it bring some happiness
i forgot to tell others
it seems too late
you don't understand
why the sky animate
your face in my heart..
look into your eyes
you see through your heart
look into your mind
you know what you thought
look into the mirror
it will show what you even dont know..
i want a new dream for my life
closed eyes are tired to show them alive
glitters of this world has already died
who wants to save you without bribe?..
Author notes
When 'I' Feature my poems, 'I' feature it with a hope to get a comment. Even if you don't like it, make a comment let me know why you don't like it..
A contest entry
- Best of the Best Final by xXFreedom-of-LoveXx.
395 points, ended June 8, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow!
This is really good!
Congratulations on winning your gold trophy in that contest!
I can see why you were chosen as the winner!
Thanks for sharing!
I'd love to read more from you in the future!
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I did not understand all of the poem:Sbut it was a great write thou, cuz ur words are used so well and have a great flow...unlik mine
check out my poems when you have time pliz x
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This was truely, honestly an amazing write. I t does not surprise me that you have won a gold trophy, you realy deserved it. You must have put in alot of time and efort to compose such a wonderful poem. I am truely happy that I have gotten the opertunity to read this piece. You are a very talented writter I hope that you keep writeing more wonderful poems like this.
For some reason that I do not know why I realy liked these lines best...
" i want a new dream for my life
closed eyes are tired to show them alive
glitters of this world has already died ( i personaly would have changed it to have instead of has but that is just my opinion just ignor me)
who wants to save you without bribe?.."
It was so captivating and the last line was so very moving, so cold, nice write
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You write very deep writes...and this too is lovely in flow...I enjoy your writes very much!
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Wow this was truly beautiful. I felt your emotion expressed deeply and powerful, touched my heart because I know where you are coming from and I know these feelings well as I have experienced them myself many times. Sometimes it seems as if all the glitters of the world turn to ashes and the world seems so dark.
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Great
Thanks for joining my contest
take care
good luck
I really want to say from heart that
i love these 2 sentences
"i want a new dream for my life
closed eyes are tired to show them alive"
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sometimes i dont understand what happen here
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i liked it! good job!!!
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