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Ted...

We are the knights of light and dark
The elemental spark
Lesson’s soldiers gone unborn
Sol the core of reason’s morn
Core of misdirected minds
Misspent in tragic alibis

Insipid sepia toned frames
Identified ideas in spite of names
'Till all the fields be laid and bare
Theatrical the graceful stare
Triple pleasure at what cost
Plentiful the blinds that light the frost

Full the spirit sown upon the field
Sprightly harvest rain revealed
Hardened newborn tender souls
New with purpose hopes and goals
Purportedly the heart of sin
Tedious the law where reading ends

Usual in faith if not belief
Inhales the righteous with relief
The fever rages in the storm
Veracity in shape and form
Citing legends word for sooth
Leveling both lies and truth


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  • grannyeri gold member
    March 21

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    Really like the side bars on this page. Really great flow, rhythm and rhyme in these lines. Alliteration work well throughout these verses. Sounds good when read out loud too - gives it lots of passion.

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    • WarrioroftheHeart
      March 21
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      Thank you, I am glad that you liked reading and reciting the poem and I'm glad you liked the background graphic as well.

      Thank you for your comment, it is greatly appreciated

      Adrian

  • Ludovica
    March 18

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    Smooth and enjoyable

    There was no effort involved in reading that, only sheer enjoyment. The language fits together seamlessly, while the rhyming keeps the tempo in check. Quite simply, it is wonderful.

    • WarrioroftheHeart
      March 21
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      Thank you very much, I am glad you found it effortless and enjoyable.
      Thank you for spending the time to read and comment on my poem.

      Adrian

  • Touchof1der Moderators member
    March 14

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    It's so wonderful to have the privilege to log into a site such as this and savor the sweet flowing words of another as I have done on your page. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
    ♥ Touchof1der

    • WarrioroftheHeart
      March 14
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      Thank you, glad I could get you to appreciate the privilege we both share. I am glad you liked the flowing words

      Adrian

  • Chocolate Chip
    March 13
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    wonderful write! i love the images your words created in my head, loved them!!


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    March 6

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    This was an enjoyable read. You painted a very vivid picture here.
    Well done.
    Keep up the good writing.

  • DJWebb gold member
    February 20

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    Love the rhythm and pace: deliberate and unfailing.

    It's an inspiring and mysterious poem with a definite feel good factor. Like the rhyme and metaphors too.

    Great write. Hope to read more of your poems.

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  • tarcus silver member
    February 19
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    A fitting tribute my friend to those who have gone before.

  • Polaja
    February 7

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    The rhyme in this piece is amazing... I really enjoyed the rhythm and the flow, your words are beautiful and your use of language is wonderful... I'm glad I stumbled onto this piece... I really enjoyed the read! Ted is my grandfathers name and drew me in to read this... it captivated me til the end

    Keep writing

    Polly

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    • WarrioroftheHeart
      February 7
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      I am glad that you liked it Polly, thank you for the comment and taking the time to read.

      Adrian
  • stiljnxd
    February 6

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    great

    This is a very powerful piece and flows nicely. I love the choices for background as well. Nicely done.

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    • WarrioroftheHeart
      February 6
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      I am very glad that you liked it, thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

      Adrian

  • OneWickedJuggalette
    January 25

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    i love the flow and this is a fantastic piece the rhyme is wonderful and there is alot of emotion in this write you did a great jo

  • Mirrors shard
    January 20
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    ...this poem has a nice rhythm and the words are well chosen...

  • Perception silver member
    January 20

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    I really liked the flow and the rhyming. It is what really jumped out at me. You definitely have a way with words, for you seemed to choose them well.

    Great job!

    • WarrioroftheHeart
      January 20
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      Thank you, I am very glad you liked the flow and rhyme and thank you for the nice words

  • SunnyTerraNight
    January 18

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    Not all first impressions are good, but this one was freakin' great! At times I zoned out, but when I jumped back in I really like it. Kudos to you!

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