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Landscaping-Gold

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One way it carves us, this seeing and knowing,
is to dry the eyes, the corners, the furrows,
the very squint at it like clay cliffs
left looming over the look of life’s power.

Warm water, skimmed slowly by ice,
crackling the calm of first impressions,
yet, below the surface great unseen power
roils and stirs the muddy bottom.

What has been observed is taken in,
what can not be stood, has wept freely.

At night, when no illusion is forced,
I see the quick balled movements
beneath a surrendered tightness
as you sort the levels of deep dark things.
Raw earthly alignments, ancient kiss
of inner seeing refines colors,
makes them sharper, brighter, more soothing.

It is why you wake up blinking:  startled at reality
when such sweet subtle hues
have had their way with you.
It is why you wake up bleary-eyed,
rubbing knuckles to sharpen the focus.

I may not know your soul, but I see
what work has been done.  I watch time
troll the sea blue of your eyes
looking for sea glass, perhaps, or dead kelp.
There, in the rivulets of rawness
is who you are.  I love you for the surrender
that shows on the landscape of your face.

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AP poem 1085 - 262

©Carol Desjarlais

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  • Celticmoon
    November 30, 2006
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    Now this piece I certainly did enoy quite a lot. It was a most unique take on writing of the eyes while also keeping to theme and idea of the contest. A most interesting look into this set of eyes. They speak of so much and reveal much as well. Nicely Done!


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 18, 2006

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    MAGNIFICENCE DEFINED

    "There, in the rivulets of rawness is who you are. I love you for the surrender that shows on the landscape of your face." Sighhh...Sheer magnificence, my Sister of the Sacred Spirit...I love this poem for its rawness & depth, Carol...for its clarity & understanding...for its compassion & admiration...for its unending Love...Completely beautiful, Lady...Good luck in the contest, my dear Friend... Wanda


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      November 18, 2006

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      TY

      Thank you for caretaking my poetry gf. You know of coure why typing is my nemisis. Now me glasses need changing methinks. Yer me favoritest!!!!


      • Night Hope gold member
        November 18, 2006
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        Awww, thanks, Sweetie...Wanna change glasses with me??? Could get interestin'...