you've wasted a cry
for you only get one
funny how the tears fell
the post nasal drip choked
swallowing balls of reality
pelted my bitter heart
thoughts of you, now cold
by the icy river you made flow
wish you'd seen the show
just how ugly you made me
such a sad melody i became
show you would have enjoyed
too bad you weren't there at all
to see the cuts you burned in me
one cry is all you get, you see
too bad it was wasted all on me
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A contest entry
- Prewrites Galore and Nothing More by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended February 22, 2007, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is an interesting one. I think some of your thoughts weren't complete, and if dug deeper, maybe you could add more, but if you want that vague affect, then keep it the way it is. I liked your deep cuts line, though, deep cuts can't be burned into you (literally anyway).
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True reflections
Hello there young lady. Recently I penned a sad love poem about someone holding a flower in their hand and crushing this to relay what they actually felt like deep within their heart (crushed life force all drained etc). Much as you’ve relayed here, the pain and deep hurt we feel at such times. Heartache is one major topic literally every person living can truly relate with, sadly. Love is different for us all, in it’s own unique way, heartache sadly feels the same for all.
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Damn!
We are sharing alot of the same here...LMAO we always do.
We should compare oneday and laugh so loud the ghosts of lovers past will hear us!
Miss you
~Deena
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