Before the monster danced with me
He sought the deepest fears I see
Raised the spirit of the dark
Blanketed my naïve heart
Then in lights and flashing blasts
He sucked the magic from my art
Monster of void, silent beast of the mind
Ate the beauty he could find
Author notes
The new word counter thingy on the right hand side says fourty six words used but a manual count tells me fifty...
Weird
A contest entry
- 50 words by Khadidja the Wise.
450 points, ended November 28, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this, though it is short. The entire piece speaks volumes.
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I've noticed that the manual count seems to be slightly weird. Don't worry, I counted 50, too.
I had to shudder when I read your poem and I hope that there isn't a monster, which will steal my ideas! Very well written. -
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Thank you for double checking the word count.
I am glad you thought it well written and I hope you enjoy hosting the contest
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Wow! Intense and love the words you used, "magic of my art," "ate the beauty." This poem gave so much personality and realism to the "monster of void."
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Thanks for the clappy's and comment, I really appreciate that you got so much out of it.
This new applause thing is a bit confusing isn't it?
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Impressive
Yes, that monster, the large all consuming void, you described this quite beautiful, almost elegant for such a horrible feeling.
Kudos Adrian.
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Thanks
Thanks also for the advice, after I got home I couldn't remember exactly what you said but I tried to change it a little along the lines I recalled, hope it looks alright now -
Thanks anne glad you liked the write much appreciated
Adrian
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Great
this is really well done Adrian...if I am on the right track in thinking you are talking of your migraines
Mebbe not but it works for me brother
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Thanks Lin... You know I like readers to interpret these things for themselves
Glad it works for you sister
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bravo
i like it flow is really good i dont what to say what i think it meaning is but i think i have a clue loved
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Thanks lovelifelive, glad you liked it and I appreciate your comment
Adrian
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