In a world so small
nothing feels right
someone is heard
yet your holding on tight
feeling the strange side
not sure where to go
as I lay next to you
i feel so.....
what to do here
nothing to look for
to feel the drained souls
laying in my hands
I try to free you
know that your gone
so little things matter
where can i belong
your carried so far away
why can't I come
my feelings of redemtion
has fell like a bomb
the stories i tell
are held within a heart
with no key
why can't my feelings let them out?
to belong with something
or to be loved by someone
it's all a circle of lying fate
I feel so.......
A contest entry
- Seekers of Love, Paradise, or Peace by Wandering Spirit.
600 points, ended May 6, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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awesome
wow hun this was amaizng...your work has so much truth and emotion to it... your a fantastic writer...each and everything i read your work there is always somethign that amazes me when you write... you also have the most amazing choice of words it really fits into your work well...keep up the great writing...
im sorry we havent talked in a lil while it has been really crazy ehre with exams and such...it was my bday on monday im 19 now... hurray lol
anways great write and talke to u soon -
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hi
sorry i havent talked to you in a while i hope you have a great christmas and a happy new year
*jolly*
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great write
i like the way you express yourself......good write,,,, i will take a look at the rest of your poems...
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Great.
This was very good. Although slightly confusing (maybe cuz I'm sick) Very strong emotions you put here. Very sad yet lovely good job poet!
~Winter
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PERFECT!!!
I really love this peice. It is so full of truth and emotion! It is a wonderful write, the pain is felt and the tears are cried!
GREAT WRITE, KEEP IT UP!
the brit brit -
Sad
All alone maybe? I've been there. This is a really strong write. Good job. It's very sad though, I can feel the pain coming out of it. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more! ~*~Heather~*~ -
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thanks
Thank you for your comment i appreciate it and just know that all my poems are from my past and some are recent
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