I'M MOVING ON
I told you that I loved you,
and for an entire year I showed you in every way.
You never once cared to acknowledge me,
to you love was a silly game that you would play.
Well your game is foolish and prideful,
I don't appreciate the way that you treat me.
I'll never get over how shallow your heart is,
and the way that you shut me out completely.
I tried for so long to make it work,
I wanted to spend the rest of my life with you.
But, no matter what I tried it wasn't enough,
I could never seem to find a way to get through to you.
So I ended our relationship and moved on,
I tried so hard to forget about the way that I felt.
Every time I thought that I had moved far enough,
you would show up again and tear down the walls that I had built.
I need you to understand how I feel,
I honestly don't love you or want to see you anymore.
I haven't thought about you for so long,
all of my hopes and dreams with you, have gone out the door.
You need to learn to let go of me,
move on with your life so that I can too.
Don't make this any harder than it already is,
I have much better things that I have to do.
Please understand that I won't let you do this to me anymore,
this hasn't been a relationship for far too long.
I need to find someone that will love and appreciate me,
I need a love that is honest, reliable and strong.
Things will never be the same between us,
there's no use in you trying to persuade me.
A simple kiss upon my cheek,
is not enough to convince or sway me.
I am going to turn and walk away from you,
don't bother following me cause I won't go back to feeling that way.
I am sick and tired of all of your lies,
and this heart of mine has nothing more to say.
Author notes
This poem was just a thought that I had.
I know that it is something that some of us can relate to. Thanks for reading and have a wonderful day my friends!
A contest entry
- I Need To Cry My Everloving Brains Out!! by Angel With No Halo.
525 points, ended February 16, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Friends, I appreciate your comments and review on this write. However, please do not add my name to your comments due to the contest rules. Thank you very much!
Comments
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This is so much how I feel right now. I just want to walk away and never look back. I try to talk to him.. but he does not respond.. It is basically like I am talking to myself. Anyhow.. this definately made those tears flow. Thank you for entering and good luck hon. This was well written and well worth the read!!
~Krys~
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for jsut being a thought you took the words out of my mouth that i have felt in many of my relationships and they still dont understand why it was better for me to let them go and walk away
very welll written
Stars
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This is one thing that I too can relate to. But it was more then a relationship I walked away from, it was a marriage. It was very hard on me and it took me a year to get him to see that i was done with all the BS. But now I am very happy with the man I am to spend the rest of my life with. If this is about you, you deserve better that I know for sure. Thanks for sharing your heartfelt words with us.
Always your friend,
Tammy 
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Wow, such deep meaning in this poem. Great job. I love it. I hope to read more of your work soon. I have been so busy and have not been on AP for a while. I hope to be back on more often now. God bless you and keep up the wonderful work.
your friend,
Tabitha:
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I like it I have one similar to this one it is really deep
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Thanks Whitney, I appreciate your comments!
Jeremy0826
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So True
I told you that I loved you,
and for an entire year I showed you in every way.
I can relate to this so much. I am living with a man that I have been with for quite some time now. The topic of our conversation alot is his ex. I cant see why he doesnt see it hurts me and it really is starting to make me mad. Then I read the rest of this poem and it made me think of my ex-husband. All the issues we have and still are going through. I share a children with him. But it doesnt mean I owe him my life. He is the one that walked away not me. He wants nothing to do with our children yet uses them against me all the time. Thank you for such a wonderful write you always nail them straight to my heart. I love ya for that. Your friend! ~~Shannon~~ -
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Hello Shannon!
Shannon, hello again my friend! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on this one. I am sorry to read that you are going through such a rough time in your relationship. I hope that everything works out for you and that you will be happier in the future. I wish you all the best and hope that it turns around for you very soon! Take care and have a wonderful holiday. Happy Thanksgiving!
Jeremy
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A very heartfelt poem, brilliantly written with strong feelings throughout. Well done!
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This is so sad Jeremy but a very nice poem filled with so much emotion
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You certainly are moving on. Hope everyone can make that sudden realization so as not to be hurt more.
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Hey there brother dear...How are you? Trina
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Well written, and do hope that it is just thoughts and not real for you. I am sure most of us have felt like this before. Thanks for sharing. Jeannie
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Great write Your honesty and raw emotion come through very well in this piece. Heartbreak is a terrible pain.
Blessings
LisaMarie
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Thank you Beautiful!
Jeremy
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Superb write!
Jeremy this is such an honest and emotional write that myself, and others can relate to. I hope you find a TRUE love of your own!! wonderful poem my friend. GBY
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This is a very good poem
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Thank you very much!
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hopeful...insprational
i really liked this, it made me think of this guy that i liked...like and he wont get outta my head! i am not strong like you, im glad you have moved on!
i can defentally relate to the first 2 stanzas...i loved the rhyming in the second one, very original!
this was a terrific write throughout the piece! all the rhyming was right on, the flow was perfect and it was nice to see an uplifting poem once in a while
thanks for sharing this!
take care
♥ Lynn
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Thank you!
Hey Lynn! Thanks a lot for taking the time to read and comment on this. I appreciate it!
Jeremy
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i have waited so long for you to post something new.
thank you.... i love your poetry and i missed reading your writes, very nice to see something from you again.
so sorry that you had to write such a sad piece.
you really poured your heart out here.
and just like you said many can relate to this piece.
life really sucks sometime, but just like you said in this write, you just move on. like you said you get sick and tired and just can't take anymore. when you get to that point when you turn your back and walk away, it helps you to get over the hurt and pain. a sad piece here, but just like always it is well written and the message within flows right along from beginning to ead.
excellent job...... my friend.
joyce
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A wonderful piece filled with emotion, the process of handling the pain and pushing forward, moving on is very wel conveyed in this piece. great write. keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny
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Great Work!
This is definitely something that I can relate to.
It's great to see that you have moved on.
I wish you all the best!
Keep it up.
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lovely & sad
You have done a wonderful job with this, Jeremy. It is often so very hard to move on whent the other infividual really dosen's want to or care enought to move on. Great Job.
*Go with God*
valerie
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very good
this was indeed a tale that many will be able to relate to. too many waste their life trying to keep the fire burning where there was never realy a spark in the first place.thank you for sharing this with us ,an exelent piece
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Excellent!
What a great message. You express it with a strong conviction and impact. I love the independence and strength in the entire write as it kept me just following you through the read. Good thought provoking read! Courageous to I might add!!! Bravo! Keep up the good work
~Tia
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Sentiments well expressed in these lines - easy to read and understsand the emotions you are writing about in the poem. Flows well and the best thing for you to do is walk away, as you say you will do in the last verse. It is time to move on, and so the title is very appropriate. We can relate to this very heartfelt write.
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beautiful
i'm going thru this same situation in my life right now. i havent set mine to words as of this week, but if you check out my recent one " she's like the wind" you will see it really relates. anyways, great poem.
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Oh, this is a nice little piece that you have going on here! I like this! Though it is a very sad thought to have. I wonder why you would think about those kinds of things if they didn't happen to you. Wouldn't you rather just feel happy? I don't know. Lestways, that's what I think. But I think that you have done a good job in expressing that kind of situation. So thanks for featuring this so that we all had a chance to share your words and feelings with you!
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I know what this is like. I liked it. Very nice. Very straight forward. I saw the story and the girl right in front of me.. i saw all of this happening.. meaning that the imagery was excellent. I liked how real everything was, how simple yet complicated it all poured out to be. I really liked how the title demonstrated this.."I'm Moving ON" ..Very REAL!!
Well your game is foolish and prideful,
I don't appreciate the way that you treat me.
I'll never get over how shallow your heart is,
and the way that you shut me out completely.
This stuck with me.. don't really know why.
WEll done though..
peace *&* love,
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Thank you!
Hello Zen! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on this. I appreciate it deeply!
Allen0826
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Nice Write
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Yes this is most certainly something that many will relate too. Well done and best wishes to you...Trina
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Thank you Trina!
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