the sun is not setting
the moon failed to rise
my heart is not beating
I'm lost in your eyes
your fingers still touch me
i hear your sweet voice
i long to be with you
but [sadly] its not my choice
i count down the hours
tell I'm in your arms
lost in forever
tucked safely from harm
[ ] added by taylor.
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Written November 15th, 2006
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Wow I really do like it, the first stanza was beautiful and I was upset that to find it was only three stanzas long. There was a typo (tell instead of till) in the second line, last stanzas and the next line didn't exactly make sense to me but with that little bit of editing you can have a really wonderful poem!
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This is beautiful, and I especially love the first two stanzas.
A beautiful depiction of loving someone forever.
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