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Violet Satin

When  I enter the gothic cathedral 
of my  aphrodisiac nightmare
I can feel  my crimson blood  dripping
and staining  the pages
of my dreams

When  darkness arrives
I can hear the orchestra
playing the melody
of my melancholic lullaby

and each tranquil note  of  my  serenade
brings me (into) tears  that I shed on  violet satin
whenever I watch my reflection  beside the candle
at night

Author notes

Word bank: use the words: Gothic, cathedral, nightmare , morbid, crimson, blood , orchestra , reflection,and candle
Written November 14th, 2006

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  • Willie66Boy
    November 29, 2007
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    I really like your background here. It sets a pleasant stage for the good read that follows. I think I said this before, but you have a wonderful way with your words.


  • catz Moderators member
    December 4, 2006
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    This a little different, at least for me, but a nice poem And I love your background

    Good luck in the contest

    Dee


  • countrybabe gold member
    December 4, 2006

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    Well Done

    Well done my darling little sis, I loved every word of this piece. You have such a great talent for captivating your readers through your words. Good luck to you in this contest.

    Keep writing.

    Love Your Big Sis
    Countrybabe


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    December 3, 2006

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    dark and sensitive in one..

    You did a great job by using all words from a wordbank and make it such a wonderful poem...
    I loved the contrast hidden in it..and just fitting all..
    Good luck to you in the contest,
    XXJeannette


  • Huntress silver member
    December 1, 2006
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    cool poem, very dark and just a little creepy Good luck in the contest


  • Lauren Noir
    November 19, 2006

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    and each tranquil note of my serenade
    brings me (into) tears that I shed on violet satin

    That's a really good verse for getting the mood right
    The mood was set beauitfully in this, a gothic, beautiful scene
    With darkness crawling and nesling inbetween beauitufl lines
    I loved the way you used the words darkness, then you put in the word candle
    It set a beauitful lamplit room setting for me
    I could feel the beauty and darkness

    Well done, you made a beautiful job

    Love as always
    ~*Lauren*~


  • Desire gold member
    November 17, 2006
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    Magnificent!!

    Wow~ Magnificent Masterpiece You have created Di
    Powerful emotions and You made Beautiful use of the
    Word Bank~
    I could see the images in my Mind ~
    Oy

    Thank You for sharing Your talent!
    I'm Happy to see You picked up that quill~~
    Keep that ink \flowing\~~

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Theater Of Dreams
    November 15, 2006

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    GREAT job.

    Fantastic use of the words dear. Impressive indeed. ♥

    Godpoppa!


  • pattyann4500
    November 14, 2006

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    Another dark but lovely piece, Di, Sweetie. Your poetry is still as beautiful as you are. Love, Gramma

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