Last night as I lay sleeping
I dreamed you were there
We held each other tightly
Soft music we heard everywhere~
We gazed into each other's eyes
And you took me by the hand
We walked along the shoreline
Leaving footprints in the sand~
You laid me gently on the ground
Growing passion was on fire
You touched me with burning hands
Filled me with desire~
I held my arms out to you
But you seemed to fade away
I called your name out softly
There was nothing left to say~
I woke up with my pillow
I was holding it so tight
Wet from all the tears I had shed
While dreaming through the night~
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Written May 7th, 2003
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Wow this is great one can relate to the feeling oh so very well. I have been there few times my self. I like how you set up this write. It was very good. I like my soft pillows on my bed. Great job.
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Sure is odd where dis old computer dumps whe we click.
Nice place to land though,
(Pensive I am, at the moment>)
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Oh my goodness!!! This is so sad. Even though the title has the word "dream" in it... i took it for what you were saying. This was a magnificent poem. I could feel everything in here. I loved reading this poem!
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*sniffles* so sad. Touching poem. If only our dreams would come true - omg that sounds so lame lol. I'm saying if only the person we long for would step out of our dreams and into our arms...that is still sou nding lame *shuts up*
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Hello there Susan! Yes, this is such a very nice piece. I do get a bit hung up in rhymes myself every so often. Then, I go on a trend and can't avoid using them myself. Irony. Regardless, about this piece... it did flow so very nicely. I could picture the theme without the blink of an eye. Nicely done. Now, I shall go fluff my "hugging" pillow. Well, thankfully without the tears
Best regards...
.kimmie
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Very beautiful poem,
nice flow from head to
toe.
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For a rhyming piece this is really good. I mean no offense, but rhymes just aren't my area, they usually sound too forced and a bit trite, this however, flowed wonderfully. It just seems liquid in a way. The ending was surprise, I wasn't expecting such heartbreak at the end of this. Kind of made me jump a little, all the same, it is one of the reasons I enjoyed this is as much as I did. It rhymed and had a great ending! It was good all around. I enjoyed, thanks for sharing. I am in LOVE with that pic, too. Wherever did you find that?
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Awww Susan. All of us have been here at one time or another. I woke up a few weeks ago just sobbing. (Different kind of dream though.) All we can do is TRY to be patient (and believe me, I know how hard that is!) and have faith that someday, we will be with the right one, and that until then, we don't meet too many jerks along the way.
Keep the faith.
This was such a Lovely, even though sad, journey. You do have such a gentle flow throughout your works. Your name is just perfect for you & your poetry.
~~~~~ Sincerely, Janet ~~~~~
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Very beautiful. I hate when that happens, you have the perfect dream but then you realize that it is only a dream, and you wish that your dream would come true. Good job!
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Awwwww. This is so sad...so full of emotion. Dreams are so weird, because they seem SO REAL. I loved the pic, I think it went along great with the poem. Thank you for the kind comments you place upon on my work, as I enjoy reading yours as well.
Nikki -
sniffs...
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Awesome
Awww, see, I know exactly how this feels! This is beautiful! Kind of sad too I hate dreaming about that one person, that one night of love and passion...I want it to be reality darnit lol...Awesome work...:)
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Wow, Susan. You sure captured that empty feeling that comes with discovering a dream..that seems so real is only a dream after all. I have done that alot lately. I love this one.
L
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Lucky pillow.LOL sorry susan, happens to me a lot to. and did ya ever notice that you ALWAYS wake up just as the dreams getting hot?Its not right is it?
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awww this brought tears to my eyes!!! somehow I knew exactly where each line was taking me, but it held me captivated to the end in spite of it. Well, sometimes we need to read a really sad piece and have a good cry!!!! I love this one...absolutely!!! So beautifully written Susan!!!
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Awww hun so sad, but I love that picture.
You are so prolific, always a pleasure to read your work...
Hope all is well with you...Blessings, ~ Ce
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so sweet tenderness well done
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This was such a good write that you have here it is asad yet so very tender in it wording i think that you did a great write here I thank you very much for shareing it
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Pillows aren't much consolation when tears are flowing. Sad poem, Sis, hope you haven't been crying! I've been thinking about you and wishing the best for you. Take Care!
Love Ya!
< 3 Maureen
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wonderful write, so sad, yet so full of love and desire...
alas to dream...
dream of times gone by,
times that may come again
yet, are in our memories still
blessed be
mike -
Very, and i mean VERY touching.
AWE. HUGZ 2 U GIRLIE!!! Who ya missin? And why? Reminded me of when my ex went to war. No fun for me. Late nights without sleep. UGH. Well, I'm here if ya need to talk crazee lady. Love ya. 
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Such a beautiful tender yet sad piece Susan but written with so much emotion you wrote this wonderfuly though it was a heart string piece to your soul........Hugs hon, Sherry
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Oh wow susan, really powerful piece susan, very sad, and very heartbreaking:(
I don't know the feeling, but i can imagine how badly this would hurt, and what it would be like to be having the most wonderful dream in the world, only to wake up face down in a tear stained pillow...wow, very awesome...
and it was really soothing and sensual too susan, very nice combo...
kayla* -
omgs, really wonderful write. i can relate to it only toooooo well. a gorgeous write hun, I really loved it. blessed be
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Thanks for reading my poem this one of yours is incredibly passionate and discriptive and really sad. There is a great, great understated sadness and a great tone. You are very talented. Keep writing, Good luck in love and life, Dot
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wow, tears upon the pillow to grow the seeds of newfound dreams.
A wonderful piece here.
WSD -
do not touch it
Susan , wonderful write. At first I was going * sigh * , then came to the end Hoping things will look brighter soon for you , keeping you fondly in my thoughts
Reenie -
Very nicely written and expressed poem. Thanks for sharing this one.
Ali -
Susan, this is beautiful, but sooooooooo sad:( Your rhyming is excellent!!!!!!!:)
Love ya,
Karen
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Excellent
A most beautiful write Dear Susan ....
Soft and flowing .... carrying one along on the gentlest of waves ....
(sighing)
Wonderful thoughts .... even though the ending be sad ....
Take every care Dear Friend,
Sammy.
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Oh, Susan, I was all ready for some hot luvin' in the sand, and then it got all sad on me. Beautiful though, and it flows smoother than the tides of the ocean.
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Wonderful write ,,,, Loved it! The ending sad but surprized me.
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Oh honey this is so sad I wish you the best you know that. You're in my prayers. Hey that girl has the same color hair as I do
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oh my... this is beautiful... sad and absolutely STUNNING! Susan... this is most definatey my fav by you! I think... like... EVER. Your emotions poured out of this in such a rhythmic flow. You could feel the pain so well... This was ASTOUNDING... I'm speechless
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