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Waiting for the Minaret to Speak (Revised)

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Into the west the tired sun sinks

Bathing the world in gold and pinks.

A tower reflects the dying glow

As moments pass, the shadows grow.

From wall, mud huts, and minaret

The still and mute zephyrs abet

A host of desert ghosts, whose silent

Glissades prowl o'er the sandy sight.

A quiet waits for the twilights's call

To evening prayer and in the lull

Twixt sinking sun and rising moon,

The muezzin stands with sober mein,

Then starts his Islalm paean grave

Which Muslims chant from birth to grave.

     "God is most good.  God is most great!"

Night shades repeat the litanies

On soughing sighs and desert breeze.

     "There is no God, but God, I vow.

       You speak the Truth, of this I know.

       God is most good;  God is most great!"

Soft echoes of all prayers abate.

     Whispers.  "There is no strength but God."

     Soft sighs.  "There is no power but God."

Wind whispers slowly drift away.

A quietude awaits dawn's grey.

All is tranquil, still, and peace,

Total silence.  All sounds cease.

One by one the stars give way

To rising sun and dawning day.

With setting moon and  glowing sun

An adhan says the day's begun.

     "Awake!  Arise and come to pray.

     Chant the prayers for break of day.

     Prayer is a better gift than sleep.

     Greet the day with joyous leap!

     Arise!  From duty do not shirk

     Please God with the best of work.

     For work is best and is not odd

     That work is best for pleasing God.

     Awake!  Prayer can never descecrate.

     God is most good.  God is most great! 

          There is no God, but only God!

 

Slowly the world wakes to the prayer,

A hallowed song on desert air.

Again the sun treks to the west

O'er shifting sands and high dune crest.

Shimmering mirages trick the eye

While wafting breezes breathe a sigh

And gliding shadows seek the shade

To shun the sun's brilliant  parade.

The morning orison in reverence sung

Another Islam day's begun.

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  • Shadows-stars
    May 12, 2007

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    I really like the flow and rhythm of this poem.... I have to be honest here, I am not a big fan of religeous poems, actually I'm not a big fan of religion, I am not against it, I just believe there is so much out there, so many different beliefs that who are we to say who is right and who is wrong.. who is more powerful, and well I guess you get the drift...
    However still, I very much enjoyed reading this poem, the rhyming is wonderful and flows so well, a few places here and there sort of fall out of place, but the rhyming is kept throughout the poem and keeps the reader in rhthym...
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always.

    • mamad gold member
      May 13, 2007
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      Nor am I that religious. After years of looking at God through many eyes, I am not sure of what I believe. Nor am I Muslim. I have been mentoring a Muslim poet on this site and the poem came from nowhere. Perhaps because I like this child so much. I am glad you liked the poem. It was well received by those of Islam on this site.
  • Vera Rich gold member
    March 30, 2007

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    What a pity you felt it necessary to put a note relating it to yourself... Do try to detach your poems from own concerns and let them speak for themselves...

    And the rules did ask entrants to avoid explanations

    Your poem will go forward for the "champagne" though... and you should hear later today how many points you will get in the "shareout". So please leave your poem on the site until you hear about this...

    Please note I shall be critiquing all entries in due course - but it may not be for a few weeks... Please be patient

    • mamad gold member
      March 30, 2007
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      I am sorry about the author note. The poem was a pre-write and I just added it as such. The author note was there. Should I have deleted all the comments as well. I have deleted the offending relationship to my Iranian girl.

  • mamad gold member
    December 16, 2006
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    < Thank you.

    One of the brightest days I spent on AP was the day I found Massy. Her poetry is a joy. As is she. Your last stanza brought me up short. I was totally unaware that Islam actually accepted the Immaculate Conception! That is a Roman Catholic concept! I think I need to find a copy of the Koran and read. Thank you for your poem.

  • NickBlaze
    December 15, 2006

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    This ia a spectacular write, I admit. Good rhyming, especially. I had not read the first version, but this one is fine as it is. The alliteration is also very good.

  • SuicideBride
    December 15, 2006

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    Wow, Written beautifully

    This was amazing!Excellence of flow,a masterpiece! You are truly a talented poet. This was a breath of fresh air, a cool breeze on a hot day, a cloud beneath the scortching sun. A masterpiece and I hope to read more of your poetry in the future. My step sister served in iraq and this is really how muslims are. THe spend thier lives trying to please thier god with the things that they do. I especially liked theese lines:Slowly the world wakes to the prayer,

    A hallowed song on desert air.

    Again the sun treks to the west

    O'er shifting sands and high dune crest.

    Shimmering mirages trick the eye

    While wafting breezes breathe a sigh

    And gliding shadows seek the shade

    To shun the sun's brilliant parade.

    The morning orison in reverence sung

    Another Islam day's begun.
    It paints a beautiful picture in my mind.

    Keep up the amazing work.
    Peace & love
    till death
    Angel

  • rollingzen
    December 15, 2006
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    very beautifully..tastefully rendered..


  • Rose Angel gold member
    December 15, 2006

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    Outstanding!

    Excellence of flow,a masterpiece! Gifted poet..It makes me arise from within my spirit..That the God of the whole universe is alive, and alive within me..Beautiful


    • mamad gold member
      December 16, 2006
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      Thank you for your comment. I wonder about the masterpiece, but the poem was written from the heart for a lovely girl. Thank you again.

  • lighttingfire21
    December 15, 2006
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    lighttingfire21

    veary vary good


  • Frodofan silver member
    December 6, 2006

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    interesting

    This was very interesting. I liked the rhyming, but in some areas it seemed not to rhyme at all and then also only slightly which I thought took away from the piece as you started off with such definite ones.

    Also here,
    "To rising sun and dawning day.
    With setting moon and rising sun"

    The repetition of "rising sun" seemed a little awkward.

    Otherwise it's very nice. It seemed to flow along like a breeze to me. A warm breeze.

  • Live4FandFs silver member
    December 6, 2006

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    Beautiful Prayer

    You've done an amazing job, it feels as if I'm the one who's praying bending on my knees and asking God for forgiveness as I bow down to his existence. It's very beautiful and also reminds me of Native American Prayer ceremony I'd attended. I love reading and understand the actual meaning that I found to be same no matter what religion - Hinduism, Islam, Christianity or Sikhism and every other form of religious philosophies. I love your style of writing reflecting perfect flow and rhyme.

  • Vernal Bloom
    December 6, 2006

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    Beautiful indeed!

    Auntie, I do proud of this poem of yours. It was really my honored to see such brilliant poem from your hand. The way you ended it is sweet again. Ah my dear auntie, I really don’t know how to appreciate you for this!
    Thank you from the bottom of my heart

    ~Your niece~

  • AutumnSky
    November 25, 2006

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    Very evocative piece. All minarets speak to us, and sometimes to those outside the Muslim faith as well. I believe, as a Muslim, that first and foremost, we are human beings, and we respect each other as such. We all have an intrinsic dignity, rich or poor, which we must respect. Your poem reminded me of the many times I have heard the Muslim call to prayer, and the glimpse of Divine Beauty which always accompanies it. It always moves me, as did this poem.

  • Aytac Atlas
    November 22, 2006
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    very good ....


  • ParadiseBliss
    November 20, 2006

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    Brilliant

    This is amazingly serene in substance, and whole-heartedly woven in a majestically superb language. It only reveals how pure and true is the emotion that led you to pen this soul-stirring piece of poetry. I am so glad Massy led me on to this page. Hope your pen keeps flowing in the direction of divine inspiration. May God bless you with every happiness in life. Good luck, Sophie.


    • mamad gold member
      December 16, 2006
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      Thank you for the lovely comment. This has turned out to be one of my favorite writes. Maybe because the girl is so special to me. I find it amazing that Islam and Christianity are so similar spiritually and so far apart politically. I wish it were no so. Thank you again for your comment.

  • panegyric ink
    November 20, 2006
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    ilovewhereyou'veledus.

    Indeed, God is beyond any infinite we could ever hope to imagine!

  • Autumnpoet
    November 19, 2006

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    Its about the dawn time prayers.The calmness of the scene and faith.The time to wake from lazy sleeps and to pray for God.
    I'm so touched to read it.As I do believe and wish well for loved ones too...For a change,the great respect you have for Massy Sis is nice to know.The poem is wonderful


  • zain
    November 19, 2006

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    Great imagery here.. it's really pleasant to read something that shows Muslims in a good light for once.. Thank you for writing this. Islam teaches us to have religious tolerance and show respect to other cultures and religions. Unfortunately not too many Muslims follow that now. Thanks again.

    Take care,
    Zain


  • BluesMermaid
    November 19, 2006
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    Beautiful

    Hmm =] I loved this piece, it shows us -muslims- the way we really are, not like the world views us. Thank you darling, this is very much appreciated


  • Vernal Bloom
    November 18, 2006

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    Bravo, auntie

    Auntie, I really don’t know what to say. I’m terribly speechless. You brought many of my beliefs into your poetry. Allaho Akbar means God is great that we say in our prayers every day. Adan and the meaning of some of its verses are observable through your work. We Muslims respect all divine religions including Christianity. I wish I could gift all flowers in the world to you. This is my heartiest wish for you. Thank you thousands times.
    We Muslims pray for people we love. I pray every night for you. I didn’t reveal this to you till now. With love and respect to you

    Your niece
    ~Massy~


  • vibiesh
    November 18, 2006
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    Good

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