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The Pain Inside

 







Fragile porcelain mask deflects all hazards of

everyday reality. Reoccurring fractures

continuously pasted over and

buffed out of view.



~*~



Emotions

locked away in

a file cabinet of self blame;

neatly tucked between the vanilla

creases labeled shame.



~*~


 

Flames of hatred

are fueled by resentment

within a fireplace of confusion.

Cascading tears bath a tortured soul

endlessly in silence; though never cleansing

away the tattooed filth left by an abomination's

diseased touch. Bruised flesh heals and

becomes hardened to real love.



~*~


 

Diminished

hope births a belief

of worthlessness that drowns

the heart and soul in the falsehoods

of self inflicted misery. Scarred inner beauty

cowers in the shadows. Burned as a child by hands

of unconditional love.









Author notes

The fourth set of eyes!


Written November 14th, 2006

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  • SilverButterfly gold member
    November 15, 2006
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    Superb writing!

    I am humbled by this masterpiece! I love every word you penned my friend.The background color sets it off and the font is perfect with the excellent writng skills you have portrayed in this piece. Absolutely superb!!! GBY
    Edited on Nov 15, 6:58 p.m. because ''.


  • Sharcu silver member
    November 15, 2006
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    Wow! I think to date I've only read two of your quotes and none (or hardly any) of your poetry. But this is fantastic! Meaningful, deep, well thought out, great form... powerful emotions that flow fromt he words. Well done! Thanks for sharing
    --Tim

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    November 15, 2006
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    this poem speaks volumes to me... I don't want to write a book so will just applaud it dear... but know my applause is a standing ovation!


  • -Ink Artist-
    November 15, 2006
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    Incredible! This piece overflows with pain and anguish and scars. Absolutely beautifully sad and extremely poignant. This piece is rich with amazing metaphor and alliteration. Seemingly sincere emotion grips the reader. The form presentation of this piece adds to the impact. Truly a powerful write!


    ~Lori


  • Rose Dark Thorn silver member
    November 14, 2006
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    Breath-takingly beautiful, and very fitting. You captivated these eyes in a very mesmerizing way. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck.


  • Fug-azi
    November 14, 2006
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    A++++++

    I love everything about this, the words used, the form, the alliteration, the metaphors ... such an excellent write deserves recognition.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    November 14, 2006
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    A very creative write. Beautiful expression of emotion. Nice alliteration. Masterful word choice. Lovely metaphors express a heartfelt sadness in this piece. Well crafted. Shelley


  • Celticmoon
    November 14, 2006
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    No offense but no you can't borrow my muse. I just got Him back and now I am chaining Him down in the dungeon so He can't escape again......


  • darkknight marellus
    November 14, 2006
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    Can I borrow your muse for a day or so? I liked this one. It's really great! Thanks for sharing with us and good luck in the contest.
    ^-^
    Ellie


  • SomeoneNobodyLikes
    November 14, 2006
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    deep

    wow great piece! i really liked this because it wasnt the clique..."sad" poems...if you know what i mean. i liked the font that you chose as well, it worked. your word usaged was very good, and your personification of your emotions was done very well.
    "neatly tucked between the vanilla
    creases labeled shame. "
    --i liked how you used the word vanilla.
    your last line:
    "Burned as a child by hands

    of unconditional love." was most chilling...
    great work on this.
    good luck in the contest girl!
    thanks for sharing this, take care.

    ~SomeoneNobodyLikes


  • leakypen
    November 14, 2006
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    "Bruised flesh heals and
    becomes hardened to real love."
    I love these lines, they are so powerful, partly because they are so true. Actually, that is how i would sum this poem up- powerful. It really made me stop and think. I'm not sure if I like the form as i thought in some places, like the beginning of the last stanza, it interupted the flow making it uncomfortable, maybe this is what you intended, i mean it is an uncomfortable subject matter.
    Interestingly i thought the form worked perfectly in the first stanza, that is my favourite stanza as it really reminds you that the subject is a child.
    It's a great poem, well done.
    Mim x


  • hollowgod89
    November 14, 2006
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    this is great... i love it, i love poems like this... keep writing. kudos


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 14, 2006
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    The last stanza I have
    read over and over...
    hauntingly beautiful
    in its darkness - you
    are a poet to be read
    again and again.
    Lane


  • XxContinualSlinkyxX
    November 14, 2006
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    this is beautiful...i like it alot...do keep writing...comment my stuff? thankies ♥'s *~Windy~*


  • Celticmoon
    November 14, 2006
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    My muse is not pure gold HE is PLATINUM!!!!
    Edited on Nov 14, 1:30 because 'typos'.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    November 14, 2006

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    oh this is beautifully dark rich in metaphors and imagry when your muse is on He is pure gold hahaha well done My lioness
    Love,
    Master

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