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Eternally

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Eternally


I stand in rays of sunshine,

stroking window glass.

Winter’s draft invades the cracks,

a ghost mist I can't see.

Cool air hits my skin,

shivers graze my spine.

His gaze is hot upon my back,

my thoughts are purely sin.

A silhouette of naked form

I stretch and wander back

to that moment, long before

I ever knew his name.


With cocky charm and crooked smile

he leaned against my locker,

crossed his arms and ankles too,

his effect so much like liquor.

“Excuse me, please,” I whispered,

heat rouging red my cheeks.

Eyes locked on the ivory squares

beneath my size ten feet.

“I’ll let you pass, but first,” he said

“you must say the magic word.”

“Please?” I tried, but failed to move

his muscled, six foot frame.

“Try again,” he teased,

with merry, lime-green orbs.

Then to my total bafflement

the words I couldn’t quite believe:

“Just say yes, ‘tis easy ‘nuff,

and I’ll pick you up at eight.”

He punctuated those sweet words

with a jaunty wink.


At twenty-two I wore white lace

and claimed him as my mate.

Two cars, a house, a dog, and then

ten tiny, dainty toes.

A baby girl, then twin boys,

we held them all so close.

Diapers, walkers, dolls and trucks,

soldered to teenager’s angst.

I wrinkled here, I wrinkled there

my breasts began to sag.

I traded in my size five jeans

for tens that were half stretch.

Yet every night he’d say in truth

you’re beautiful to me…

You’re everything I need.


In our lives we’ve crossed so many

bridges, roads, and seas.

Yet always grasping, reaching out

to try and touch our dreams.

My hair might hold a silver thread

his might be thinning fast.

The grand kid's music seems too loud,

and what’s with all those baggy pants?

But steadfastly I fall for him

like dice tumbling from a cup.

Sometimes landing solidly

sometimes in an awkward lean.

The changes happen gradually

you hardly even notice,

but suddenly the mirror image

is one you’ve never seen.


When in my knees I feel an ache

I’m pulled from my reverie.

I limp a bit, back to the bed

where he lies so placidly.

He takes my hand and plants a kiss

between each gnarled knuckle.

His breath is warm, his tongue is wet,

it jet skies down my throat.

“You gorgeous girl, you wanton vixen

I’ve got a gift for you.

Bend your body over mine,

and once again you’ll touch your youth.”

He takes me back to virgin teens

then fast forwards to a scene

of he and I, the cat, the dog

all lounging on the porch.

In my hand, a glass of tea

my other hand in his.

Two rocking chairs that face the east

to watch as each sunrise begins.


 

We bend, we move, we spiral back

to childhood and our teens.

We sing, we laugh, we fly on faith

through adulthood and advanced maturity.

We mix age up and shake it still

in photographs and memories.

We live, we cry, eventually we’ll die,

of that we all agree.

We live inside a two-tiered glass,

pass from one life to the next.

And if growing old is this divine

I’ll gladly sail these white-washed sands.

Until the last grain makes its drop

and I land just below.

There I’ll wait until I feel

the glass has tipped again,

bringing me back to my love

on sands of eternity.



Author notes

I wanted so badly to write for this contest, but the muse...I guess she's still in hiding. : ( I have roughly 6 hours yet...so IF I'm able...I'll still write and pull this out...but as a back-up Plan B, something is better than nothing. lol

This poem obviously isn't what "Is", it's more about how I always believed it would be, and wished it would be. I never did get the beginning right...but I still have hopes I'll have that happy ending with the rocking chairs on a porch somewhere in the country with a great view of the sunrise...and most of all, with the one I was meant to be with...whoever that turns out to be.

Written November 13th, 2006

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  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    Very Good

    We bend, we move, we spiral back
    to childhood and our teens.
    We sing, we laugh, we fly on faith
    through adulthood and advanced maturity.
    We mix age up and shake it still
    in photographs and memories.

    Not your strongest write
    but quite perfect for the contest

    Like the thought of this

    Rick


  • Blue Rew silver member
    October 25, 2007

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    It is long but you've made it worthwhile with an engaging display of feeling. I also like how you weave in the imagery of an hourglass, very subtle,
    yet making an impact. Truly a tribute to soulmates

  • OurxBeginning
    July 2, 2007

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    Wow, this is such a fantastic write. I loved this, and I can relate in some senses. I loved the love and the journey that you really portrayed. Awesome piece, thanks for sharing.


  • Stickboy gold member
    April 10, 2007

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    I had tio read this several times to grasp all of it... it was very touching. thanks for entering good luck in contest

  • ea silver member
    April 4, 2007
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    wow, a very ambitious and entertaining piece. I really liked the first stanza all on its own.


  • rlmcmd
    March 17, 2007

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    Absolutely Devine

    Tearfully I read this again loving every word.
    So lovely:

    "But steadfastly I fall for him
    like dice tumbling from a cup.
    Sometimes landing solidly
    sometimes in an awkward lean."

    Wonderful, beautiful poetry:

    I’ll gladly sail these white-washed sands.
    Until the last grain makes its drop
    and I land just below.
    There I’ll wait until I feel
    the glass has tipped again,
    bringing me back to my love
    on sands of eternity.

    This tells me volumes about the heart of the poet. A joy to read.
    Bob

  • rlmcmd
    March 13, 2007

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    Dreamy

    "We live inside a two-tiered glass,
    pass from one life to the next."

    Stunningly beautiful words, so simple a truth, yet so difficult to understand fully.
    Love your poetic mind, Bob


  • cgirl0410 silver member
    March 13, 2007
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    Nice piece. Thanks for entering! Good luck in the contest. - cgirl0410


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 16, 2007

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    "Two rocking chairs that face the east
    to watch as each sunrise begins"

    Sighhh...I hope it's not always "only fiction", trista...for you as well as for me...This is a lovely penning, Lady...Congratulations on winning the silver...Thank you for your kind words on my entry...Be well, Poet... Wanda


  • -Ink Artist-
    February 14, 2007

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    Something I can totally relate to! This is wonderfully written and such a poignant look at a lifetime of loving just one. Beautiful work, indeed. Thanks for your entry and good luck!

    ~Lori

  • Endeavor gold member
    February 13, 2007

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    Lovely

    Just reading again

    Love this

    There I’ll wait until I feel

    the glass has tipped again,

    bringing me back to my love

    on sands of eternity.



    Rick

  • Soulwindow
    February 11, 2007

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    What can I say that hasn't been said by others?

    Not much really J. But I can say this ... you've written the plot for the what I and my 'she' would dream of as our own movie. Beautiful. Thankyou.


  • lucy sky-diamond
    February 3, 2007

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    a long but well worth reading poem, i enjoyed it immensly. lots of nice description and imagery. thanks for your entry, and good luck


  • x Gemini x
    December 2, 2006

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    Amazing

    You truly have a way with words! The imagery is amazing, and the whole story is so perfectly...CUTE! ^.^


  • real irish rose
    November 30, 2006
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    A very beautiful and emotional write,all the experiences and emotions I hope I will be able to experience in the years to come as I have only been married for a year in July past.
    Well written and indeed a pleasure to read xx


  • StarEyes
    November 27, 2006
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    This is beautiful!!!!!!!! To pick out a favorite part, would mean I would have copy and paste the entire thing here. This is just so beautiful, *sigh* if only life could work that way. Like in this dream! Best of luck in this contest.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 26, 2006

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    Most excellent write, my friend! Your wording is beautiful! Much deserving of applause


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    November 26, 2006

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    A wonderful dream, for everything to be so perfect...you did a marvellous job in making it believable...I liked the fact or idea that life still goes on in the bedroom when the old bones start to seize up

    you're very skilled at expressing some wonderful imagery...

    A joy to read

    Love and smiles
    ~Lilac


  • Lionslove silver member
    November 23, 2006
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    ..trista!!!! awesome, sweetie!!! wonderful, wonderful work...and thanks for posting it in the reading room!!!

    wml...............................Lionslove


  • maa gold member
    November 22, 2006
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    applause

    some applause, of course !


  • maa gold member
    November 22, 2006

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    heartfelt congratulations

    heartfelt congratulations to your bronze-win, dear trista. and the best of luck in the finals.

    marion


    • trista gold member
      November 22, 2006

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      Hi Marion,
      Thanks so much.

      Best of luck to you in the finals also! It's been a fun contest thus far and I'm honored to be left among this wonderful group of talented writers.

      All the best,
      ~J.


  • panegyric ink
    November 20, 2006
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    very diferebt and satisfyinglyso!

    This, for me is a great write. I struggle, so it's hard for me to come out with such perfection.


  • Kei-Aira
    November 19, 2006

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    I think this is a great poem. You write about time very well, and I love the story within the poem. You haven't made it too much of a narrative but have split it between showing the passage of time, and discussing the nature of time and aging. I think this works very well.


  • hugh wyles silver member
    November 19, 2006

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    real and moving.

    Dear Trista,
    It may be fiction to you but I can relate very strongly to this poem which embodies much of my own experience. I have bookmarked it because I want to tweak one or two lines to smoothe out a few metrical bumps and improve the 'flow'. Just me being picky. I'll send you my edit when I have time to do it.
    Apart from this, it is an outstanding and very touching poem. Well done!
    Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.

    • trista gold member
      November 23, 2006
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      Dear Hugh,
      I'm so sorry your comment on this got lost in the AP upgrade. Seems like I've missed several such comments on various poems. Very frustrating!

      Whenever you have the time, I would love any suggestions you have to smooth this out a bit. If you want to email them to me, I would at least be sure to get it.

      Thanks as always for your time, the comment, and the applause.

      Much love,
      ~J.


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 17, 2006
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    Just looking again

    Rickie

    By the way, what do I have to do to get a poem posted on your page.. ???


  • Forgotten Garden
    November 15, 2006
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    WOW! This piece is beyond words! I am a newlywed and I can only hope that my husband and I will be like this 50 years from now. Knowing that there is still some sanctity in marriage and that some do last gives me hope and strength to never give up. Thank you.

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 15, 2006
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    Excellent

    My lovely Wife,

    Just reading and enjoying your words again. If I could give you your dreams, you know I would.
    You are the first woman I ever loved that I did not love sexually. You taught me somthing new.

    I guess for that, I will always have a special bond, My Friend.

    Love, Your Rick
    Edited on Nov 15 because 'Spelling'.

  • trista gold member
    November 14, 2006
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    Bob,
    You are such a sweetheart! Thank you so much for the lovely comment and compliment. I hope all is well with you.

    Much love,
    ~J.
    P.S. Since Rick is my AP husband, does that mean you are my AP brother-in-law?

  • trista gold member
    November 14, 2006
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    Hiya Hon,
    I'm glad you liked it. And you are right, it is the fantasy life I would have chosen if I'd had the choice. When I was in high school I wanted to be married with a half dozen kids by the time I was 25. My best friend never wanted to get married or have ANY kids. She ended up with a kid she didn't want (her parents have primarily raised him) and a husband she "settled for" and eventually divorced. Me? No husband except for my AP one, which just happens to be you. lol The dream of children lasted aprox. five months before crashing down around me. I find it all very ironic that the things we want most seem to be the hardest to get. But you know what? I still feel like at least part of the dream is still within reach...

    I need to let this sit a bit and then will try to smooth it out, hopefully it will be less awkward then. Thanks so much as always for reading and commenting.

    Much love,
    ~J.

  • rlmcmd
    November 14, 2006
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    Excellent

    Dear Trista,
    What a wonderful life. To grow old with such profound grace and happiness is the rarest of gifts. Your bueaty as a person is only, rarely, out-paced by your bueatiful words. Bob

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 14, 2006
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    Excellent x2

    My Lovely Trista,

    In a few thousand words I could tell you all I read in my first three readings. I will simply say... I love your dream, your fanticy. Few will ever experance it all. We are best to live as far as we may, crasping and tuching in thought and life, each peace we come close to.

    This form is ackward to me, but the words are so enchanting,
    it overshadows and surfaces above the page as a wonderfull story

    Love it all

    Your Friend, Rick

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