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Yesterdays promises

 

 

     

 

Stepping through the stone of heaven and earth

seeing a reflection of  'Once what was mine

Only the fading sun seems to cloud my memories

of these past judgements that I've hastily made

 

They will forever remain within this heart

never to allow a second chance to change my path

Tears fall upon "An Angels shoes" with pain

leaving only the scars of ~Yesterdays Promises

 

My heart is filled with overflowing sunshine

from this loving spirit that guides my soul

The skies dim hue of greys still settle in my heart

while silent wind whispers for a gentler day

 

Trees let go of lifeless leaves and softly drift away

as the season takes on a brand new transformation

I shall watch over you within the windows of time

to a spring morning that fell on ~Yesterdays Promises

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Author notes

This was written for my son (Adam) that passed away, he was 18 yrs old & will be forever missed

A contest entry

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  • FightOffYourDemons
    December 8, 2008

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    This is very well written and I can feel your sadness throughout the poem. I am sorry for your loss.
    But I have to tell you that all the extras, the title above, the text colors, the "an angel's shoes" and the way you have yesterday's promises written is all completely unnecessary and merely distracts the reader which you do not need to do as when you block out the rest, or copy and paste and take out the silly italicized and quoted words like i had to do, the poem is quite great.

    Just something to think about,

    Thanks for entering.


    Nikki


  • Walk-Free
    September 3, 2008
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    round 2

    http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2419787

  • PureCountry
    August 30, 2008

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    Gets,

    knowing of your abiding love still, for your son, I am always touched by wwords written for him.

    This one continues the trend of wonderfully written poetry that only a father's heart can. Thank you for shairng this offering.

    Best of Luck

    Silent Hawk


  • transit
    August 25, 2008

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    aaww

    I love the style of this poem and the picture was cute too. Losing a child is one of the hardest things for in the end, it is almost only them who will be there for us and we will always love them no matter what and it must have been very hard.

    The poem is melancholy and the ending was good.congrats on the bronze and good luck in the contest!!

    loveees,
    transit~


  • Beauty Of Silence
    August 25, 2008

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    wow!

    this is a beaaautiful write! i love the structure, the colours the picture and everything about this poem! your words painted such gorgeous pictures in mind... it was a stunning write! >.<

    ~beauty of silence


  • BellaD
    August 12, 2008

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    Such a touching, heartfelt write. Very beautiful. It never seems right for a child to die before his/her parent, but your son is truly in a place where all is forgiven and waits for you there. God bless and thank you for this entry.

  • tigress3737
    January 3, 2008

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    It broke my heart to see the inspiration for this poem. I'm sorry you had to endure such a hardship and you love shines through brilliantly in this lovely poem. Thank you for entering my contest


  • Celticmoon
    October 24, 2007
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    Thank you for taking the time enter and good luck to you!


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    October 3, 2007
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    This is beautiful and I don't want to DQ it because I know what this took for you to write. But you wouldn't respect me as a friend and a poet if I kept hold of it for it's sentiments. I'm sorry it didnt make it through my contest, but please know it's a beautiful poem...how can something from your heart not be huh? I hope you're well. Laura x


  • whiterabbit.
    August 27, 2007

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    This is really a lovely poem. It's so beautifully written. Wonderful write doll. Thanks for your entry.


  • Lady-Pegasus
    May 24, 2007

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    Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. What a touching piece, my dear one, almost sad and yet gentle and tender as well, wonderful combination, well mixed. I dowish to ask if in line 11 perhpas you means sky's as in belonging to the sky not as in plural. Just curious. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    May 15, 2007
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    Congratulations on the bronze Gets


  • catz Moderators member
    May 14, 2007

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    beautiful poem to get pleasantly lost in, gets. I especially like the third stanza, something about it touches me within.
    You did a profoundly beautiful poem, my friend and I wish you the best in the contest.

    Dee


  • FifthDove
    May 14, 2007

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    This poem is so lovely I felt as though I would get lost in it the tenderness and beauty radiates throughout the piece. Nicely done Best wishes, Dove


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    May 12, 2007
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    This is just wonderful,....quite calming too...a lovely piece by your hand Gets

    Tears fall upon "An Angels shoes" with pain,
    leaving only the scars of ~yesterdays promises

    WOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWWWWWWW


    Good luck in the contest
    XXJeannette

  • phoenixonfire
    May 11, 2007
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    AW!!! This is so beautiful!! SO angelic...loved every word of it!! There is so much feel in the work that I feel all relaxed and nice..this is great work!! Love the pic on the top..the baby looks so relaxed!!

    Thanks for sharing and good luck!!

    preets


  • Kari gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    This is so beautiful and touching. I loved it..and the words in it. The best of luck to you in the contest.


  • Partners In Crime
    May 11, 2007

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    Awesome Write

    This is just purely an awesome write. I loved every beautiful word of this piece. Well done.

    Keep writing

    Countrybabe


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    January 20, 2007
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    Beautiful, GETS, truly lovely.


  • MotherMachineGunn
    January 13, 2007

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    Very heartfelt and true to life, sadly.
    I found it to be very well written with wonderfully descriptive lines.

    ~MotherMachineGunn~


  • -Ink Artist-
    January 11, 2007

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    This touched my heart, Gets. It is brimming with emotion. You brought tears to my eyes. Heartfelt and eloquent reflection. Beautifully sad write, my friend.


    ~Lori


  • x Gemini x
    January 9, 2007

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    First, let me thank you for entering my contest.

    Second:

    This poem was very touching. Great use of vocabulary. The flow and imagery was very well done. Creative and original perspecitve/idea.


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    November 24, 2006

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    An excellent poem...

    I believe life or even loss are best remembered by what we loved the most while it was our to have... I suppose my interpretation of this poem is probably not what you intended, there are different layers to this piece, each time I read it I feel a new emotion...

    There are so many wonderful lines, it is hard to pick any out as my favourite, as I love them all, you are a very creative writer... the last stanza though just brought tears to me and a lump to my throat, the metaphors are powerful and unique... I suppose I can relate to this stanza in my own personal life for many reasons...

    Beautifully laid out and reflects the picture so well, I wish you well in the contest

    Love ~Lilac


  • Frozentearz
    November 22, 2006

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    This was a wonderful poem it shows you took time and thought to write it, And I think that is a wonderful thing. best of luck in the contest
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • LadyUnique silver member
    November 22, 2006
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    thank you for entering my contest


  • real irish rose
    November 15, 2006
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    Gets this is very beautiful and really tugs at my heart strings tonight, I suppose I am maybe reading more into this than you have written but it reminds me of some of the good times in my past and makes me smile.
    Well written and as always a pleasure to read x


  • Shakes-spear
    November 15, 2006
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    Very nice and descriptive. This takes me places I haven't been for some time. Good one my brother! the Shaker


  • ebaby
    November 14, 2006
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    very interesting poem, I really like this line,......I shall watch over you within the windows of time, good luck with this contest...

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