In Dark Times
Sometimes I feel as if I'm not a part of anything
I look around, but nothing is the way it seems to be
The scenery looks so faded, like a painted canvas scene
and I'm all alone and frightened in somebody else's dream
I sit and gaze at nothingness,emotions toss and sway
A jumbled ball of discontent, a Caldron of dismay
I try to seperate a million strands of tears and pain
In hopes of finding something that will set me free again
I think if I could only walk away or step aside
I'd see myself, the way I am, through someone else's eyes
Like looking in a mirror with a magic pool inside
that shows you things forgotten that the present moment hides
Your thoughts can be so frightening and never seem to end
you cannot see the Pot O Gold that's at the Rainbows End
Then suddenly there comes a burst of effervescent light
that heals your wounds and gives you wings to flee your weary night.
(C) copyright 2000 C.V.
Erroneous Sage
Author notes
This poem was written to describe my dark times
Written in the year 2000
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still wicked...
and i also made a few minor, yet effective changes.. s'email me ; )
and isn't it weird,, i just free wrote a vivacious diatribe called "coincidental plan" and used the word _effervescent_ inside my writing; then i traversed here and realized this once again... you, too, have used the word here as well... hmmm...
what could possibly be the relationship t'here ?
ironically... i used the term effervescent apathy whereas you used the term effervescent light; however, your AP name could suggest a low self esteem... or a plea for empathy... or perhaps even identification with others whom you feel believe in the same patterns and wavelengths that you currently believe in yourself... Or ???
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spread the NV !!!
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wicked !!!
that's cool E.S. !!!!!
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Beautiful
This was a wonderful expression of depression, and a grand deep emotional contribution to poetry.
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Thank you for your comments Katy
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Brilliant poem, really good. Good luck in the contest
Katy--
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Brilliant poem good luck in the contest
Katy-
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Perhaps we would not think so harsely of ourselves eh ?
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felt
"I think if I could only walk away or step aside
I'd see myself, the way I am, through someone else's eyes
Like looking in a mirror with a magic pool inside
that shows you things forgotten that the present moment hides"
Somthing we all wish - to look at ourselves through someone else's eyes !
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This piece is very lovely.
I enjoyed its theme that you used,
and the form that you expressed yourself within.
Thank you for entering my contest!
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