Dreamland Of Love by mypassion at All poetry

Watching through
the windows of my eyes
I fantasize of you and I

Just the thought of us whisks
me away to a place within my mind;
A world I know we can call our own

Holding each other close

beneath the starry night sky,

we kiss.

The touch of our lips

are gentle like petals

from a blooming rose

Our souls entwine

refusing

to never let go

while the flame in our heart burns bright
making each moment

more memorable then the first...

then a single tear falls
I sigh...

and return from where I came

all alone in silence thinking of
nothing but you and I and as

I stare out far beyond heaven above

I think to myself

how do I tell the one
I so truly adore

that I love him

with all

my heart and soul

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Written November 13th, 2006

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Shakes-spear
October 26, 2008

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This will do fine!
This would melt the heart of the grinch. I think you need not ever ask this question because you know how over and over! You are filled with passion and you can thank mom for that! This is so sweet that I almost forgot your my sister and was jelous! Bubba
slavelisa
October 12, 2007

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Wow
What beautiful words, he must have been fast asleep when he read this, I love the way you take us on that dream land journey with you.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings so openly

lisa
Endeavor
August 9, 2007
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Endeavor
July 22, 2007
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Endeavor
May 23, 2007
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Endeavor
January 10, 2007

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Excellent x2
Some words just come to us
and fit like hand and glove

This is quite beautifull
both in it`s sound as read
and for the thoughts so clearly captured

Like the ending plea

And as I stare out far beyond heaven above
I think to myself, how do I tell the one
I so truly adore that I love him with all
my heart and soul

Gelorias

Rick
Endeavor
December 17, 2006

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Excellent
I have felt this before

I know the place you stand

This is very well don

perhaps one of your best

Love thisand then a single tear falls
I sigh...and return from where I came
all alone in silence thinking of
nothing but you and I

And as I stare out far beyond heaven above
I think to myself, how do I tell the one
I so truly adore that I love him with all
my heart and soul

lovely

rick
penman
December 12, 2006
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Reaches to the bone!
Oh my Brenda, could you capture heartache with more passion or intensity? This peace literally has the essence to touch one's marrow in my opinion because of the emotions. I hope writing this gives you some comfort over such heartache.
Akimbo
December 11, 2006
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Fantasy-astic!
Great read...full of feeling and earnest emotions. I think that is what I like best about it. You've captured a real sense of honesty here that is only heightened with the predicament of your ending.
Well done, thanks, Kj
December 5, 2006
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He will know...
If he reads these tender and moving words. Your poem is wonderful. I have one titled: "Dreamland" which you might enjoy. Another poet told me about this one and I am new here. I'm glad to find such a romantic heart. You have talent.
- mypassion
  December 7, 2006
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  Thank you
  
  Unfortunately he has read this several times and to this day he never realized I wrote it for him...but that is the past and today is today..We are good friends but nothing more..(sigh)but anyways thank you for stopping by and taking a look..I will go right now and read some of yours..God bless, and welcome to AP there are alot of great writers here who always show support and guidance..
  Happy Holidays, Brenda
- - Endeavor
    February 26, 2007
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    Men are fools
- mypassion
  December 7, 2006
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  Thank you
  Unfortunately he has read this several times and to this day he never realized I wrote it for him...but that is the past and today is today..We are good friends but nothing more..(sigh)but anyways thank you for stopping by and taking a look..I will go right now and read some of yours..God bless, and welcome to AP there are alot of great writers here who always show support and guidance..
  Happy Holidays, Brenda
Faded Existence
November 16, 2006
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This is a sweet poem, I did enjoy reading it. Good job!!

-Ambz
between slices
November 13, 2006
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gloomy stuff? are you writing a lot of those recently? I'm sorry, i just haven't had a look at your work in a long time.. Maybe you should keep sendin me links so I keep in touch with them..

let's have some more!
mypassion
November 13, 2006
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I too wasn't to sure if it should be of or from but I see it more clearly now that someone else read it...I adore your enthusiasm in reviewing my poem..I am trying something
different besides my gloomy stuff.. Thanks again
and thanks for the coffee..yummy-I needed that..

God bless, Brenda
between slices
November 13, 2006
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oh gosh.. this brings back memories...
ugh.. makes me cringe within...
with me, it never went the way i would have liked... and i'm personally glad that you're married and have wonderful kids!
but i feel sadder for the persona here, cuz she seems to be totally in love with this person... i guess mine was just a very deep infatuation.. i dunno...
anyways.. i do like this.. the subtle words you use makes it more touching..

there was a stanza i read and i want to share with you my thoughts..
"and as we kiss the touch
of our lips are gentle
like petals from a blooming rose....."

well..
1) should it be "from" or "of"?
2) read this: "and as we kiss the touch of our lips"
just with this much, what image do you get? to me, it invokes a much tender and a different way of describing a kiss.. what do you think?
you might have used a few cliche phrases.. can you think of any other descriptive image for them?

anyways.. thanks a lot for sharing this..
bless ya!!