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Released

Like a blade across my skin
like a nightmare, like a sin
I am destroyed from within
I need to be released.

Broken wings from long ago
tortures I had to under go
when I was at my all time low
I want to be released.

Like ice against the window frame
I am frozen in all my pain
happiness I cannot obtain
I must be released.

Storm clouds low, dark, and mean
an unheard torturous scream
it's much worse than it may seem
I struggle to be released.

Like a ghost, so deathly white
almost ready to give up my fight
when my fear is at it's height
I scream to be released.

a lonely shadow clothed in grey
I did not always appear this way
I am the one you had to betray
I cry to be released

A dancing flame across a room
my body it will quickly consume
it's a signal to my imminent doom
Must I die to be released?





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Written November 12th, 2006

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  • sins and sorrow silver member
    June 13, 2008

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    Amazing! I really like all the metaphors, they really make the reader feel what you are feeling!
    simply amazing, great job!


  • vampireblood
    January 10, 2007

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    Wow. This is quite amazing! It was very dark, and interesting. I liked the rhythm and flow of your piece as well, Great Job!
    ~~~Vampireblood~~~

  • selfdenial
    December 13, 2006

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    ok....

    So my first comment was one of total amazement, but I am slightly worried about you. Just so you know. I know we only met on here like 2 months ago, but I feel like we became really close. So I just want you to know if anything's wrong I am here for you. I still absolutely love this poem. Your new ones are also very well written, but this is still my favorite.

  • ohdavey2008
    December 11, 2006

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    good poem






  • ohdavey2008
    December 11, 2006

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    good poem







  • November 22, 2006

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    Touching

    I really love the flow of the piece, it had such great meaning...it's simple and to the point!!! Keep writing and sharing!!! I loved it!!

  • tuxedomingo
    November 12, 2006
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    I think your metaphors are not exactly congruent, but this is lovely. As lovely as it can be, being so... not what one would usually assign the word lovely to.


  • xXxThat GurlxXx
    November 12, 2006
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    Whiteoutwipeout~
    Hey! I thought that this was a really good write. I like what you did here. Keep on writing and I hope to come across some more of your works soon.
    ~!~Manda~!~

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