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White Insanity

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Echo's of broken promises, deceitful lies and battles,
Have left me forever tormented, slowly dying inside.
You love to watch me spin, unable to halt any of your evils,
When I try to make someone hear the truth, I'm quickly denied.

The only one who has been there for me is my shiny friend,
Always I will respond to her beckoning calls.
My strength is being tested, to see how far I can bend,
Will I ever get a break from these downfalls?

I fight to stand up once again, just to be trampled farther down,
Ignored and hushed, forced not to speak of my memories.
Next the inevitable won't be fought, I'll completely breakdown,
I'll be tossed into a padded room again part of the crazies.

My daunting screams will remain unheard for all time,
The pain shredding my insides and consuming my mind.
Every word from my mouth will be silent like a mime,
I will be left in a world of white insanity, eternally confined.

I will never find an escape, it's like struggling through a maze,
Bleeding is my healing cure, my razzor is my absolute everything.
I'm stuck in a dark land, mutilating myself and stuck in a daze,
It is just a matter of time before I am no longer breathing.

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just a poem that i wrote about my feelings and stuff.  
Written November 12th, 2006

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  • Improv Machinery
    July 19, 2007

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    i really like this poem. you really captured the essence of feeling trapped and alone. you really have a knack for painting with words. great write.
    Rob


  • aloneintheworld
    June 4, 2007
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    nice one i really like it


  • juliex-exotic shine
    May 24, 2007

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    I really love this poem. The emotion and the darkness to it is in incredible. It's a great poem!
    x.


  • MahoganyFlow
    May 22, 2007

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    You say my poem is powerful...this smacks you in the face!!! You can really feel the emotion in this. Love this!! Cool user name by the way


  • x Bright Eyes x
    May 21, 2007

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    wow this is so powerful and so many can relate loved how you worded it and how you broke it up into sections they were perfectly done loved the way you described everything as well really well done


  • my imaginary friend
    May 11, 2007
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    realy really good!

    wow i love it! especially the last eight lines, i could really relate. fantastic work!


  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    April 25, 2007

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    I love it, it's dark, its powerful, its emotion filled, it's great. Some powerful emotions expressed with the aid of some deep and clever imagery very good write. Well done


  • XMysticalNightmareX
    April 9, 2007

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    Another great piece I really like how u wrote it..keep on trying to be strong and remember I am always here for ya

    ~Ashley










  • Jeb
    February 17, 2007

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    Damn!

    This is not only very heartfelt, but heartbreaking as well. I can relate to very much of it, I too have been ignored, left all alone when I needed only love and compassion. For a long time I believed neither of those would ever exist for me, hence all the dark poetry I have written and still write, even though I'm madly in love with my fiancee. I can relate to much of this because I believe I am slightly insane, or maybe even more than slightly. But hey, who the fuck isn't right? This was an excellent write that has an awesome flow to it. I really like it! Bravo to you!


  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 25, 2007

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    Wonderful deep and emotional. It is amazing what our past can do to our minds and how the only escape we often find is through self pain. I am amased at how many can never understand that, they find it so wierd. Yet when you have been broken and abused for so long, sometimes the only relief is in physical pain. This is beautifully truthful, thought very sad. As for the padded room, you do not belong there, believe me I know. Someone is near that listens to your screams and understands, always remeber that.
    Great work! Keep it up and keep being you!
    ~mystic


  • FaeryPixieFey
    January 12, 2007
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    Deeply Dark

    Dear Darkling---this was fantastically Deep. Oozing with emotion yet feeling dead inside amid the torment. Wonderfully played out. Also---I love your front page!!!

    Smoosh Dear before I whoosh away...FaeryPixieFey


  • Xx Morbid Beauty xX
    December 17, 2006

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    AWESOME JOB!!!!

    wah chrissy this was great. Your words have so much truth and honeslty scare me all at the same time... thanxs so much for your wonderful comment and i know that are there.. i hope u know the same as welll... we really need to get together
    keep on writing your amazing.....
    how is the publishing thing going?
    Krissy


  • -MrsWonka-
    November 17, 2006
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    amazing

    wow i love this. you can vent your pain so well through your writing. i can really feel it. i cant say much about it, you have said it all .

  • UnderTheSurface
    November 17, 2006
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    great write, I haven't found much poetry that has truly caught my eye yet, but this somehow grabbed my attention./it had good rhythm and the imagery was amazing. sorry if this is based on truth, I can think of a few ppl who would fit into this poem too, and its not fun at all. well good luck, and great work!


  • Hidden Innocence
    November 14, 2006
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    Ok so pretty much you're the best writer I've come across in a while. In simple language, you're the shit. I love your ability to write. You have a gift for capturing the reader and making them want more. I love this poem...it's now one of my favorites. I hope you're doing ok...how are you doing? Me? I'm fine...a bit worried about you after reading this though. Never stop penning, because you're absolutely amazing at it. I can't even pick a spot in the poem that I like the most. It is all beautiful. You should have entered this into my contest! It's still open! Oh well...you could always enter something else if ya want to. Anyway, take care. Love ya. *hugs*


  • Bruised.Roses
    November 12, 2006
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    wow babe, this is great!!!!!!! I love the rhyms in it the language gives it something ...this is one of your best yet, so whymsical and inspirational your words touched me on a whole other level in this one. I love you'r works and you are an amazing author.....you should never ever ever stop writting babe, you have a strong talent for it!!!!!!!!!! so keep writting
    love ya
    ~tasha~


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 12, 2006
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    one self

    it may help if you read my poem called the chamber for within our minds there are places few go and when we do we are all lost hang in there and look for that one person inside there that gives you the most comfort and get to know him and forget the rest that dont understand the inner you

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