Waters damask edge smirks with glassy detachment
Cryogenic austerity netting wayward questions
In a crystallised sieve of dysfunctionality
Scant trace of yesterdays citizens
Who voted for districts in warmer climes
Embarking on marches in synchronised flocks
Blue enveloped the russets and golds
The quiet land sheathed in pale amaranth
Crisp crunches announcing human disturbance
Smoothly glazed surfaces covet willing inhabitants
Tinged with a mirrors precipitous vantage
Biding the slow moving hands of time
Stillness pervades dawns essence
Enchantment and wonder gently flows
From the inexorable breathing of a sleeping season
Author notes
OPTION #2:
Nature Inspired-
Well the best my muse could come up with right now. May try to improve if I can.
Kind regards
Previn
Written November 12th, 2006
A contest entry
- Anything and Everything by Welcome-To-Hell.
700 points, ended February 16, 2007, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Divine Ruminations by Alexander Hine.
324 points, ended June 5, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Option Contest by Beating.
600 points, ended June 14, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seasons! by soccer220.
475 points, ended November 12, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Great Job
Great choice for this contest! Thanks a lot of citing when the poem was written- it really shows that you paid attention to the rules! It is very descriptive- awesome! Thanks for entering and good luck- keep writing!
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"Stillness pervades dawns essence
Enchantment and wonder gently flows
From the inexorable breathing of a sleeping season"
I love that part. It's very poetic and a perfect ending. Great write! -
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Hi pappa
thanks for the great comment on my powm, much appreciated.
Enjoy your day milady.
Kind regards
Previn
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Thankyou for entering this little contest of mine. I will return to comment on everyone's poems later, but for now just a thankyou.
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I love the flow of this write grabs your attention and doesnt let it go exclellently penned best of luck in the contest
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excellent unpenning of the seasons
with enhanced vocabulary, your vocab takes us on a journey without any fee around the waters of seasons passing in a smooth flow......Artis -
Brilliant
I thought this was uckin brilliant, even though if Im honest I didnt know all the words I still got carried along with the jist and the imagry of this poem, great job.
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Wow!!! Thanks for the awesome comment, really appreciate it.
Regards
Previn
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beautiful words all drawn together to paint a lovely picture. interesting contrast you have between diffrent styles and pieces in your portfolio. Will have to check out more later good job though
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this is a lovely piece..lol.when i read this.i was struck by the impression of NYC..anyway..this kinda of poem..i haven't read anything like it in a long time..the kind that doesn't really focus on one topic..but its broad but still manages to capture my attention..nicely done..however..please follow the rules..i don't know if this fit into one of the option..if it does please put the option number..u have great talent
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