four spokes
with gray paint
a dog's paw
Author notes
Anonymous contest! Please don't type my username in your comments, and I'll pleased.
I have chosen the option called "something funny"
Thank you
Written November 11th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Lots Of Options by keeyley.
300 points, ended November 15, 2006, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - short writes by kristianman.
450 points, ended May 22, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was a cute write. VEry good. Thank you for entering your poem in my contest. K
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Knowing I had this image in my stash, I couldn't resist posting with my comment to you--And it's gray too!!!
I like the image you've written as to "spokes" in relation to a dog's paw print in this haiku. Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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1+1=2 = a unit by grouping so its 1 then +1+1+1 = 4 sections!
SplishSplashPencil (you're an aficionado of it?),
"four spokes" is an X that ended up being the X marks the spot for me to be!
The two set up lines of your haiku could possibly be about stopping building a bicycle wheel that has multiples of "four spokes," usually with 36 the sum for something at the finsh. Thus thoughts could go to if you would be totalling it with the beginner number being it when putting on the second line "with gray paint" unless pre-powder coated parts of assembly so far!
But you spoke of something else that had an aha like a bark! A gray foot that doesn't go on a pedal, "a dog's paw." The use of his/her digittal pads and balancing the top side-by side pair with the large metacarpal pad underneath does construct the shape of your title.
It does carry a situation of resonance as I keep thinking of us having to have a leg raised or held as to notice this which projects stopped movement, yet there is momentum of what naturally flows for "four spokes" thoughts. But without it being hard as a hoof, the question comes up, did it get wobbly?
With few comments here on a late entry, it's dark but I give you a light bulb of home
don't turn away or it might not be fun!
7:41 Mamma loves you more now?
It can't be by comparison because if that disappeared would the emotion for an equation?
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Very Loving :-)
Mamma turns into PetrifiedAfforded right now,
My first gracias is that you qouted "four spokes" 3 times as though it were a haiku in itself!
Your ) was important to me. I was enthusiastic when i wrote this like you had hoped. Now, it's more then just an idea, but a bag of thank you's!
"four spokes" is an X that ended up being the X marks the spot for me to be!"
I think the x's are pointing out the four points? I dig deeper with my claw and say that it represents also front half of paws on a dog, and back pair. that is f4 And, I like that you know he/she would make that mark in the ground as a teritorial place to come back to.
;'stopping building a bicycle wheel that has multiples of "four spokes," usually with 36 the sum for something at the finsh;'
4X9=36. I did < by myself pretending we're in the old days without calculators. "sum for something at the finish" was a great laugh because you have to do the math and then you can see it in real life or in your mind next!
I liked your computer smooches you gave to me by saying that it was a great haiku. I smiled when you didn't scroll to the end of the (well,short) poem too fast anyway to find that the aha was a good coyotes call. I chuckle where you know that dogs aren't like monkeys, in which to ride bicycles. But, it's flipped- it's the spokes that would go onto the pedal! aha haha! I will research the last sentence of your 2nd para.
"But without it being hard as a hoof, the question comes up, did it get wobbly?"" -- Probably. He was bouncin hard in that car, wasn't he>? Even though I didn't tell it to you very funny, you got my brain rockin' happily with those words.
I have more light now so I need to go work on my poem now,
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Do you know if another way of thinking at the inception could be over a tomato?
SplishSplashPencil (fun without a fin?),
You're not poor with parentheses but it's like having a portal for tangent thought?
You're a cutie counting my attentions until the reader can be found with nested haikus, own and author's. However the three factors for the conclusion is elementary not the monumental part, of whether I made a shown amusing sentence... but you made yourself a giggler with it by the fun of the number that can begin the idea.
I want to give you the v's of very good for all the turns we can take on X and four points, since "also front half of paws on a dog, and back pair" could be included in set up thinking lines of trot for those equating pigment to "gray paint."
Tense importance must have not been as important when needing to pass on to the phenominally fine creative comparison for the X that marks the spot for me to be the animal too of interest in cue form not just physical markings owned : "would make that mark in the ground as a teritorial place to come back to." Except for the typo, I loved you bringing out what I shoulda seen!
With calculation not just calculator love you looked at the information of where rubber matched yours for awhile until your eraser rolled faster... " chuckle where you know that dogs aren't like monkeys, in which to ride bicycles" not uncalled for from me but not the calligraphy of claiming understanding you had with its ending " good coyotes call" because canine could include wolves etcetera!
Ecellent finding the words for how it would be 'wobbly,' not just up in air, which can be on its back on the lawn not just limb in a hand, but you remembered the picture contest that was the inspierer for this... which has made funnies now!
9:44 not just two hours later from the 7:41 I wrote before,
Mamma
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lol!that is very nice made me laugh!thanks for entering
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