Mary had a little lamb,
the little girl had none!
~o~
Look well at what's before you that you see
children laughing and playing, all so carefree.
Yet around the corner, near some graves
are little children doing the work of slaves.
Some are six, maybe seven or eight
unable to play, unable to skate.
They know not the difference, being born this way
you did this work if you wanted to stay.
They traded their lives to do heavy labor
all in trade for a building with rats for a neighbor.
A single spot in which to lay their heads in total distress
only to abruptly awaken and continue to digress.
A small fist of grain was their only daily meal
no toys to play with, no joy or thrills.
Just heartache and sadness unless they found
that death was better than being a slave in this town!
Stop and look , look all around
make sure all children are there to be found.
Don't let the dealers buy their lives for pennies,
save these children from SLAVERY; it's their ENEMY!
~o~
Mary had a little lamb,
the little girl had none!
Author notes
This is in support of stopping slavery, Iohagh you are a true inspiration!
Written November 11th, 2006
A contest entry
- Anything... Make it move me... by Amanda21.
555 points, ended November 11, 2006, 22 entries
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615 points, ended March 15, 2007, 100 entries
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My God...
This is so emotional and powerful. So sad and absolutely mortifying. You've done so well on this poem. I had chills running through me. It's amazing at how such filth can happen to our lovely children. You've done a fantastic job. Thank you so much for allowing me to read this and you entering it into my contest. The best of luck to you. Kassie -
Interesting topic, I can honestly say I have never read anything near this type of topic! I liked it. I enjoy the fact you thought out side of the box, outside the norm. Thank you for entering and I appreciate your choice of topic!
Good luck in the contest!
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I agree with Feather Motion, I think that you should work on it a little. Some of the rhyme is a little too cliche and predictable in my oppinion, especially "Some are six, maybe seven or eightunable to play, unable to skate."...the part abo ut skating is kinda(for lack of a better word) corny. I would work on it. But the idea of it is great.
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a good piece of poetry, though it is in need of some editing i feel, where you are using the ellipses, the right way is three dots ... - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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