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I Love You


Your beauty is shining bright
like sunlight in your hair,
your skin is pure and white
like snowflakes in the air,
and if I could find the words
to say how much I care,
I'd say I love you.

 

Your face is the face
of an angel from the sky,
your smile is happiness
no need to ask me why,
for every time I'm with you
I'm so happy I could cry,
because I love you.

 

Your hair is warm and flowing
like a summer breeze that blows,
your hands are soft and gentle
like petals on a rose,
I guess it must be clear by now
that everybody knows,
how much I love you,
I love you.

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Written November 11th, 2006
The love I now share my life with----serious clown

A contest entry

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  • Margaret Denham gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    Thank you for entering your beautiful poem in my contest. Best wishes in the judging.

    Margaret


  • willowprincess
    May 23, 2008

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    it's so simple, and so sweet. the rhyme flows seamlessly. good job. and i love the way you end each stanza with "i love you". that's my favorite part.


  • DrkPoet
    March 11, 2008

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    The use of rhyme was well done and not forced, and it's a wonderful display of love to someone that must mean alot to you. Thanks for your entry


  • TabbyCat
    February 7, 2008
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    Nice comparisons. I think for me, if you removed the word "like" in some places, the impact would be greater. For example,
    "Your hair is warm and flowing,
    a summer breeze that blows,
    Your hands are soft and gentle,
    petals on a rose."
    I think the mataphor would hold more impact for many readers. Nicely penned, though. Keep it up!


  • Turning-To-Dust
    January 28, 2008

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    Beautiful.
    Delicate is the word that came to mind when reading this poem. So soft and lovely.
    Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • PureRomance
    November 20, 2007

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    This is a very beautiful poem and congrats to winning HM & Bronze with this piece. God bless you my fellow poet friend in everything that you do and write. Good luck to you and your poem in this contest.


  • live in love
    October 9, 2007

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    stunning

    it's so simple and i must say that i've seen almost this same poem hundreads of times but it is very very well written and i'm oddly attracted to it so even in useing the very normal template it is diffrent than the rest and very unique.


  • shutter-bug
    June 17, 2007

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    oh dear, i didn't comment on this one!! i really really like this. it was really sweet and had fantastic rhythm. thank you for entering!


  • Ignis Corpus
    June 8, 2007

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    your smile is happiness
    no need to ask me why,
    for every time I'm with you
    I'm so happy I could cry,
    because I love you.

    those lines are beautiful, i loved the poem good job and good luc

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    May 24, 2007
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    Thank you for your lovely entry, Josephine


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    May 6, 2007
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    Thank you for your entry

    Lovely poem very expressive and discriptive. the rhyme was good but whenever you put the line I love you in there it threw off the flow. Still I think that was the intent. It made you stop and notice that you are in love with this person.

    Thanks for the read and good luck.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • InMemoryofCharlieJr
    February 16, 2007
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    This is very nice. I like it

  • xXxSilentCryxXx
    December 23, 2006

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    Awww wow this poem was so sweet and beautiful. Such an amazing thing to dedicate to someone.
    I loved it.
    Thanks for entering.

    x


  • Animals Rule123
    November 27, 2006

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    wow this is a fantastic and tremendous poem!I woild give it a 10 out of 10 if I were a judge for a contest!this is a great poem and expresses the title!keep up the good work

  • serious clown gold member
    November 12, 2006
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    Thanks Ang,you're very kind,I can't remember the last time I made a young lady feel warm and mushy inside,lol, best wishes---Norman


  • -Ang-
    November 12, 2006
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    awe this is so beautiful and romantic and pretty. Wonderfull love poem Norman. it makes me all warm and mushy inside!



    ang

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