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Peace (A Double Tetractys, Line-Unit Palindrome Poem)

Peace…

Hard earned.

Possible

To hold on to.

Is it worth the price?

In the blink of an eye,

It can vanish forever…

Slipping through your fingers like sand.

Forever passes with a whisper…

Echoing with the whimper that war caused.


Echoing with the whimper that war caused,

Forever passes with a whisper…

Slipping through your fingers like sand.

It can vanish forever

In the blink of an eye.

Is it worth the price

To hold on to?

Possible,

Hard earned,

Peace.


Author notes

'The Tetractys begins with a single syllable and progressively adds one syllable per line until the final line which has ten. The pattern is: 1, 2, 3, 4 ,5 ,6, 7, 8 ,9 ,10. Many writers using this form will add a second half by starting at ten syllables and progress down to one. That would be called a Double Tetractys' (from allpoetry.com/Column/1606674 )

Line-Unit Palindrome Poem - a poem that reads from the first line to the last as it does from the last to the first.

Although I've done word palindromes before, this is the first time I have attempted the line-unit palindrome. Also the first time I tried a Tetractys (never heard of one until tonight).
Written November 10th, 2006

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  • Luna Tique Fringe
    October 15, 2008

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    wow..both of these forms seem very daunting..but to combine them next to impossible..something i would never attempt..i'm impressed


    • Barbara gold member
      October 16, 2008
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      Thanks They were actually very easy to combine and write... once. Beginner's luck, I think. I've tried to do more, and have given up each time.... too hard!


  • humblpye gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    I kinda like...

    this mirror image reversal reflection thing it's like bouncing a ball up and down back and forth beginning to end and back again, my instinct revelation if exsists such a thing, reincarnation...the world on a string, a straight line never ending, 0 to 8, don't wait, I'll be back in the morning love is never too late


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 11, 2007
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    Very nice

    Yes I found in this peice that it is worth the prce to keep faith and hope alive hoever possible

  • Kari gold member
    July 12, 2007
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    Congrats Barb, now you're the next one to host the new chat helpers contest!


  • Trial and Error
    July 6, 2007
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    *forgot to applaud*

  • Trial and Error
    July 6, 2007
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    Very very nice. Thank you for entering and good luck


  • agazeley gold member
    February 11, 2007
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    Beautifully done . .


    I have never tried this – but you have inspired me to try something different -

    • Barbara gold member
      February 11, 2007
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      If you do one, let me know...I'd love to read it.


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 7, 2007

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    I love using this form, but have never tried it along with a palindrone before. This is just wonderful and takes some time I think to get this way. I try to get the lines and all one either more or less than the one before or behind it so it looks even. Know this takes time to get right, but worth it in the end - that even appearance. Wonderful author page you have created. Thanks for commenting on my poetry this morning.
    Erika


    • Barbara gold member
      February 7, 2007
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      Thank you for your comment. This poem actually took little time to write, which surprised me. I did it in an hour or so, and the biggest problem I had was the syllable count that I had to change, which messed up the other lines.
      I've tried to do more of them, but they take a lot longer to create, and after a couple days, I give up. I guess beginners luck was with me on this one. I have nothing but respect for those who write these on a regular basis.


  • TanyaB
    November 21, 2006

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    awesome!

    Dayum woman! I never heard of a tetractys (sounds like a disease lol) before. Each stanza makes sense on its own, each with its own meaning, as well as linked together. Nice job!


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 13, 2006
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    I like using this form and you have done an awesome job at this one - and then to make it into a palidrome to gives it a double whammy. Well done,


  • bluejeans51
    November 13, 2006
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    Great job!

  • shoutuntoGod
    November 13, 2006
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    Good write. I like the way its written. It has a good flow but I dont really agree with the message if its what I think its about. Its very well written though. Great job. God bless you.

    -Shout


  • poeticweaver gold member
    November 13, 2006
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    I like this, you are very creative with your choice of words, and this turned out excellent. Thanks for sharing your talent, and this form.

    Peace, Timothy~


  • poetryality silver member
    November 13, 2006
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    This is exceptional. You wrote this with what seems little effort. You make the form look easy when I am sure it isn't. And again...you say you don't like poetry. Surly you jest. I love this. Let me go see what I can do with this form. You are inspiring.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • Iohagh
    November 13, 2006
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    Darling

    Your words are sweet
    I flitter amongst them
    as your writing fleet
    is easy to befriend.

    Smoosh

    Janet


  • pixxiepoetess
    November 13, 2006
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    This is a heck of a first try. It is a very well=written piece. Kudos for combining two difficult forms together into one. Thanks so much for sharing this piece. --->pixxie<---


  • MotherMachineGunn
    November 13, 2006
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    Sharp

    I was pleased with this write. I found it be forecful and empowering. Thank you for sharing it with us.
    ~MotherMachineGunn~


  • Cannonsfire
    November 11, 2006
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    Powerful write and you have done an outstanding job with the form. I myself have trouble using forms but you have the knack and the subject matter is very 'now'. Flow and emotion stand out well. Thank you for sharing.

  • Mother Angst
    November 11, 2006
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    very well writen poem. so true as well; peace is often very hard won.

  • SoulWhispher
    November 10, 2006
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    great

    Great job, you have done an outstanding job here, I really enjoyed the bit of poetic magic, I found the flow and emotions outstanding, great job.

  • Kari gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    deep

    Woah..very very well done. You did awesome. The subject you picked for this is powerful and the flow is good. Thank u for sharing.

    Kari

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