It was a quick decision with
Lots of planning
Thought over, contemplated, but never done
Till now
Forgot the fear
Thought only of yourself
Left all of your nothing
Stopped the pain
Killed the crying
Destroyed the scars
It was a beautiful bullet that
blew you out
The bullet that left your incarnadine thoughts
all over the wall
It was the holy bathroom where you
left lifeless memories sprawled on the floor
It was a beautiful bullet that
gave you freedom and salvation
You decided it wasn't worth it
Not even the sex, heroin or vodka
That only covered the real pain
The real pain that's been there forever
No more fake smiles
No more hidden tears
No more bracelets to cover the cuts
No more lies about being good
No more deceiving friends
It was a beautiful bullet that
blew you out
The bullet that left your incarnadine thoughts
all over the wall
It was the holy bathroom where you
left lifeless memories sprawled on the floor
It was a beautiful bullet that
gave you freedom and salvation
No more you = no more pain
= No more wasted space
Thank you, Beautiful Bullet
Author notes
ok, this is like the darkest i've written (so far). Maybe cuz i'm depressed, but i think it's pretty good
Written November 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- Open to anyone and everyone! by Aidenn.
600 points, ended February 12, 2007, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark and Depressing...Please enter by XHollowXEyesX.
700 points, ended April 6, 2007, 119 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 8 of 8
-
wow.amazing write. this is truly dark and so depressing, yet at the same the reasons that were given within the write upon why the suicide was commited makes it seem like the right thing to do. I especially love the lines
'You decided it wasn't worth it
Not even the sex, heroin or vodka
That only covered the real pain
The real pain that's been there forever
No more fake smiles
No more hidden tears
No more bracelets to cover the cuts
No more lies about being good
No more deceiving friends'
but I love all of it.
great work.
thanks for enteirng and goodluck -
the tears say it all :(
hey now, i just read this one on the paper you gave me. by the way, you're sitting next to brokenwindupdoll riiiight nooow
. I said it before and i'll say it again, i loooove it. Deep and melancholy, i'm diggin it.
<3x infinite
scrat -
AMAZING!!
Jesus fucking christ I LOVE IT!!!
BEAUTIFUL!! AND OH SO DARK!!! Dax darling, you so write better than I do!! GREAT GREAT GREAT!!!! <3 <3 <3 BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL!!!!! -
=) u need more poems!
-
its is put together to insane perfection i like it
-
oh no worries! just cuz im sad, im not gonna jump to conclusions... its just shit im going thru, it'll be okay... =)
-
this is a really good poem. beautifully written. just a bit of advice for you from experience though, if i were you, i would never or almost never write sad or depressing poetry. i used to, and my parents found it. they got very mad and yelled at me. i got so angry at them. writing poetry that's sad, dark, or depressing changes a person. i didn't realize that i had changed until my parents brought me to my senses. people commented on them and it made me feel good so i kept writing. i'm just warning you to not let it change you and make you really become that. i really hope that you don't feel like this. please do feel better if you do. but yes this poem was good.
-
I like it...Its dark but it explains the way alot of us think...i know i sound crazy. It reminds me of one of my friends who shot himself in the head...(what a considence)I give it an applaud. But when you get a chance can u return the favor? i'm adding it to my favorites...
Adding your comment:
1 - 8 of 8
4 old applause
