It's over for good between us
Our love has run its course
Or should I say my love
I don't believe that you ever loved me
At least not with equal passion and abandonment
You are not here anymore
You are not mine anymore
But that doesn't mean that I've forgotten
Although I wish I had
There are days when I miss you so much
And moments when I think my heart will curdle and die from pain
Giving you up was so hard
So why the numbness
Where is all the rage
Where are the painful tears
Why am I not cursing your existence
Why haven't I cast some voodoo spell over you
Is it possible to love with purity beyond hate?
Because sometimes I just feel greatful
That at least I have memories of you
That once I meant something to you
I'm confused by such humility
It's an alien skin
A garment I'm unfamiliar with
Yet I find myself thanking you again and again
Thank you for haunting my heart
Thank you for all the tears I've shed
Thank you for making me feel alive again
Thank you for humbling my pride
It was worth every sacrifice
To have experienced such nobility
Sensations so transparent yet vivid
Chaotic yet simple
I welcome heartache
It has become my favourite companion
After loving you, I'm alone nevermore
I'll always have a pale ray of hope
Your love that showed me that there's more to life
Author notes
No one was more surprised than me, but that's really how I feel.
I want to thank Star Shine for her title. I believe that the opposite of love is indifference not hate, and that's why I choose this title.
Written November 10th, 2006
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ok, well this was awesome!!!
lol
i loved how you were so honest about your feelings
Thank you for haunting my heart
i love that line, it is so true about this guy at the moment
love
daisy -
I am sorry I haven't commented for long, as exams are coming up. Anyways, this poem is absolutely breathtaking! The theme of indifference is very unique, it is a great break from the cliche breakup poems. The beautiful flow and straightforward diction simply pour essences of truth, and these lines strike me:
Sensations so transparent yet vivid
Chaotic yet simple
So philosophical and emotive, and yet also logical!
Thanks for sharing!
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Meaning of "Forever"
Hehe well no not really forever, but you know everything is relative. You know the saying that when you're happy time passes very quickly and when you're sad it seems that the end will never come? That's the kind of "forever" I'm talking about. I told you this is "chaos of the senses", it's like agitated water, full of sand and dirt, it seems that it will stay like this forever, but give it some time and soon the water will be clear again and you will be able to see through it again. And same thing with your senses, give them time and soon everything will be clear to your eyes and heart and mind, let the chaos precipitate in the bottom and it will fade away in the end.
Elie -
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I know what you meant. I was just being bitter which has become a bit of a habit of mine these days. You are Lebanese right? I remember seeing your name in the group somewhere. Good luck in the contest.
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Who was the first to say "Better to have loved and lost, then to never have loved at all."? This poem shows you know exactly what the author of that quote meant. This piece oozes with emotion and sentiment. Life will go on...I have submitted a few title ideas in your contest, I hope you like them!
regards,
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love is pretty weird makes u happy then all of a sudden makes u so sad this paradox of feelings keeps u alive, great poem it is aimed straight to the heart my favorite is
I'm confused by such humility
It's an alien skin
A garment I'm unfamiliar with
Yet I find myself thanking you again and again
Thank you for haunting my heart
Thank you for all the tears I've shed
Thank you for making me feel alive again
Thank you for humbling my pride
It was worth every sacrifice
To have experienced such nobility
Sensations so transparent yet vivid
Chaotic yet simple
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It is very sad and deep. I guess many could relate. (but not me). It is painful to be left by some one you love but at the same time not hate them. I think that means that your love was far too strong and powerful and true to be able to rise above hate when being left alone. You expressed your feelings very well here.
I loved these lines:
"Sensations so transparent yet vivid
Chaotic yet simple"
You need to add a space in this line:
"Is itpossible to love with purity beyond hate?"
Keep on writing and I hope you heart mends soon.
Nooni
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Well done! The only mistake I saw was, "Is itpossible to love with purity beyond hate?" - there should be a space after it. Other than that, well done!
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Actually it's "sacred". Thank you so much for your comment, and good luck in the contest.
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Yeah I know about the mistakes, and I corrected them just now. Thank you for that. I had a lot of them because I was very moved when I posted it. This poem mean a lot to me. Just make sure you enter the titles in the contest. There are no limit for number, so knock yourself out.
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There is any contradiction if you think of it. I loved this person, but he didn't love me back. We broke up, but I still have strong feelings for him and this poem is me expressing them. I think gratitude is a great idea for a title because that's mainly how I feel.
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I hope you enter it in the contest.That's the only way to win.
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When heartache becomes your companion, it's as if you've lost the heart to live, much in this is sad, and I will try to give you an ample measure of skill in poetry titles. Good luck, Titus
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Okay, I read this and I have a title... going to contest now.
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"Out of Time " springs to mind
I felt you moving on with a greater understanding of human nature...not always easy to analyse anothers emotions, but the title worked for me
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I was trying to think of a title for your poem, I actually enjoy doing that...i no a little weird rite? Anyways, I found it kind of hard because I was trying to pull out key words or ideas but the way I understood it there were contradictory feelings there, maybe you meant that or maybe I just didn't understand. Ex: you started off saying your love because they never really loved you but in the end you were thanking them for showing you love....so I'm sorry as of now I don't have a title but I did feel that thanking this person and moving on was a key idea so maybe something with the word gratitude would work. If anybody who got a better understanding wants to build on that, go for it! Nice poem, concrete and straight forward(except for the whole contradiction). Good job!
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This was crazy deep I enjoyed it to the fullest and it jst really makes you want to re-think a relationship before you get into one or re-think your realationship...uhm a title could be:
"With each breathe"
"The early of too late"
or
"scard memories"<-----thats supposed to be like scar ya know? I cant spell though -
Very sincere piece - well constructed. (Greatful should be grateful).
I like how you describe where you're at in the first verse - and how you ask all the questions in the second. In the third verse you have the thank you's, and your final verse wraps it all up with a sense of acceptance and peace that counteracts some of the sadness. Wonderful journey through the loss process.
Great job!
Precious -
Very well done, so much truth in it and confusion. We often get to the point that only pain is love to us. Nice ride on your roller coasted of emotions.
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It sounds to me you've finally realized what real love is about, that only comes about through growth, so just a few possibilities are:
Grown
Realization
I'm come to grasp
I finally understand
Lesson in Love
No terms Just conditions
My Fall through Heaven
Love's Illumination
Lightbulb of Love
Gaining me in losing you
No sacrifice too great
Through you I'm grown
I've come to realize
A gain in loss
How many million would you like...
Often I write a title before I even write the poem
I think a few of those above just might be new poems
waiting to happen...
In my fall through heaven
I come to realize
That growth comes through pain
just just tears through eyes
-Eddy
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Last line first paragraph needs fixing
"And moments when I think my heart will curdle and pain from pain"
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Oh-la-la!
Wow! this is ... it's beautiful. such strong words such emotion , passsion. I feel the pain. i detect your sorrow. it gives me great emptiness to read it. I've had the exact activity happen to me, and I know exactly how you feel.bravo I say bravo. -
Great
" The Unforgiven, I Fogave"
Hows that for a Title? By the way I can relate My life I relived in your write. Loved it. -
Very nicely written and the emotion is very passionate. I really liked it, though reminds me of my of my past... Nearly everyone could probably relate to this piece in some way. Great poem.
~Angel~
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That was very well written. I like this poem and the rhyming is also very good. I reminds me of how I felt when I broke up with my bf...how I still feel.
Audrey Rose
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Perfect description of mature love. We love our love, not just in love with being in love.
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You aren't the only one..
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wow...hmmm...im sendin this to one of my good friends, as i know that she can relate...beautifully written poem...bravo.
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This is beautiful. Filled with such passion. I love how you just seemed to let it flow from your heart. Wonderful job!
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Well done
Very well written...and I can really relate to this. Time helps but these moments are never forgotten and the numbness never really goes away...thankfully those numb spots can be lessened in time - but I haven't completely gotten rid of any of mine. Thanks for sharing this ~
James
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Thank you so much for your comment. Would you like to help me find a title? There's a contest where all you have to do is give a title. It's easy!
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Very nice piece, well expressed the flow and form and well done and the emotion is well expressed and captivating! Great work and keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny
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