Lucid dreams diminish
in a mist of Nostalgia
My epitaph speaks of iniquities
glistening in the sublime
as the wraith's serenade
prevails on the edge of illusion
the toxicity of cinders burning
decompose in a blazing inferno
as a dense alabaster musk
settles on an aquamarine galaxy.
Author notes
I used all the words. I hope you like it.
Written November 9th, 2006
What did you think
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Magical!
This poem is written like a breath of serenity. It leaves the reader in a state of astonishment. The use of language is exceptional! I can see you used the word bank with ease of hand and expertise. I am sure this is a winner! Brilliantly scribed poet! I wish you well in the challenge!
Always Lovingly ♥
Reneé ♥
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Unfortunately
It didn't even get an Honerable mention. I thought it was pretty good myself and all the other entrants didnt quite seem to know what the words meant. But I guess the contest holder was looking for something else.
Thanks for your kind words
God Bless
Tammy
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elequent
for me words are like musical notes
written together a certain way they create a song
you have done this
great writting
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wow
♥
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A Cosmic Serenity
i like this a lot.
i know it wasnt your intention,but this is kinda how i feel when i am drunk or high and all of life just kinda fades away and i can feel "content" as i breathe.
im guessing from your author comment that this was for a contest and the reason for using a lot of these good words,none the less,a great piece.
-cheers
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Sounds very Beautiful
I love teh vocabulary and mtaphor you've used that makes the flow of this poem just perfect. If my interpretation is correct, I think you are looking back in time being nostalgic about past that are now just memories. If not, this is what poem tells me in her language. I love it any ways.
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This is very interesting and different. I liked the fact that you used all of the words, but it wasn't some big long essay.
The ending was really pretty. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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First of all...I love the background.
I really love this piece! It's beautifully written. Wonderful word usage...and great job using all the words!
Just one suggestion...the ending of the poem seems a little bit 'abrupt.' I know it's sort of just personal preference, but may I suggest putting a period after the last word of the poem? I feel like it would just give more of a sense of closing. I would also like it (though again, it's just personal preference) if you put the word "and" (or perhaps "as") at the beginning of the second-to-last line. The ending just seems a little bit unexpected, not really a 'close' to the piece.
Still, though, this is a beautiful poem. I love it! I wish you luck in the contest!
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< Thanks
Thank you for the kind words. Just a thought though they would mean more if you didn't repeat the same comment for every poem you read.
Peace, Love, and Hope
God Bless
Tammy
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very nice very nice indeed
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That is one of the coolest things I have read in a very long time. I sometimes write things like this and it just boggles me how I came up with something of the like. I think it's awsome and you did a great job on this work!
Great Write!
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Well theres someone that has to win.. mines it rubbish compared to this!
Well done its a fantastic write. Good luck
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I really liked this piece! Good job and good luck!
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I have no idea the meaning of this write but the word usage is very impressive! GBY
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