weeping willow wings,
leaves of honey, dripping down,
sunshine rain,
amber,
tumbling poetry,
an avalanche of sunset,
lava tears,
autumn,
falling melodies,
dizzy life, wings left behind,
topaz blood,
diving,
music forgotten,
achromatic, decomposed,
faded gold,
fallen.
Author notes
Option2. Angels. Although here I've gone to a more metaphorical angel, describing autumn trees, music & poetry - all things that fall and fade.
Written ages ago on November 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- Options, but a different kind! by Erin200.
424 points, ended July 16, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments are most welcome.
Comments
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Pretty good.
I like the short phrases that made the whole. I would have elaborated a bit more on the "Autumn" theme, but overall, excellent. It reads well. This captures how I feel about the season all too well. -
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Thanks for your lovely comment!
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I FREAKIN LOVE THIS..
Its short but covers your point. Thats something I can't do by writing a short poem thats why most of mine are long
. You emotion spills out and you have explained it so well. I Love it the words give me chills
Amazing!! Wonderfull write!
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Ah, thank you ever so much!
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