Outside the realm of human life,
beyond the margins, another world exists;
a world of subtle, and sometimes savage, beauty.
In the airless ocean depths, life teems, unaware
of our meaningless complexities, our futile dreams.
In ancient woodlands, tinged by timelessness,
small animals rustle and scamper, busily
pulling the strand of nature around them
with instinctive purpose; while birds add
their choral harmonies to the orchestra of life.
The intricate and splendid diversity of insects,
spiders, bats and whales; wild flowers
and weeds; trees and termites and the dance
of microbes in a drop of water--all these,
which we seem intent on destroying.
"And God so loved the world."
When will we learn to love it also?
Author notes
Written November 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- Razzle Dazzle Me by Ashriel-Silvermoon.
350 points, ended November 20, 2006, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Best by Brandon Ashley.
307 points, ended March 10, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~It Doesn't Get Any Easier Than This~ by -Ink Artist-.
525 points, ended April 13, 2007, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Honest Critiques by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended May 14, 2007, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - increase the peace [or something along those lines] by Sofia Nadia.
1050 points, ended November 25, 2007, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I'm pleased to see several trophies on this wonderful penning of yours, Bill. I especially liked the first line of your second stanza, for its smoothness of alliteration. Congrats on your wins, my Friend. 
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Thank you for subjecting yourself to my review. I really like this poem. You have created some very vivid images with your words. I agree with you. Beauty can be found almost anywhere in nature.
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Wonderfully written words of the beauty of nature and the need to protect it. Your imagery is quite lovely and your lines speak to the heart. It's sad to it dwindling away around us. Very prolific message. Thanks for your entry!
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the ending is perfect
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great poem good luck
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Love it Bill!! Being raised Native American I was taught to love and respect all natures beautys and the life they hold. Also being brought up strong in faith, I was taught value all the Lord has given us in what would have been paradise if not for sin. It is truely sad to see what has been done.. I love the write
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one of the most amazing pieces i've ever read. i mean that with all of me. love it.
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Wow, this is amazing! The fact that you almost force the reader into comprehending their take on the world at the very is wonderful! *much appreciation for you, friend!
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Thank you, Icarus, for your kind comment--I'm pleased you like the poem.
Cheers,
Bill
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Many thanks, Mal, for reading and responding--very much appreciated.
Regards,
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Loud applause!!!! Such a beautifull yet sad piece here Bill. All the wondrous things that this amazing world has to offer if we only have eyes and heart to see it with. When will we ever learn. Exceptional write my friend....mal
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Thank you, Femurlee, for reading and commenting--pleased you like the poem.
Cheers,
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Thank you very much, AS, for your kind words--well appreciated.
Cheers,
Bill -
Amazing Work.
Amazing. I truly enjoyed this. The thoughts it provokes are deep and intense and realistic. I love the way you described such normal, nearly every day things, and made them seem ethereal. My favorite line was "In ancient woodlands, tinged by timelessness" That was extremely well worded. Even after giving us all of this beautiful imagery, you still ended strongly with a very smooth ending. I like this a lot. You've done very well. -
Superb
These are excellent words. The last line really drives your point home: "When will we learn to love it also?" I hope it's soon, or we will have a lot of destruction and sorrow. Great write. Peace will come ...
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