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United States...or is it?

It once could see but now is blind
It says its free for all mankind

It once was found but now is lost
Its like a ship and calm seas but now tossed

Its symbol is a flag you see
Its people will never be free, not really

I walk through it eveyday
and if it needs me I wont delay

but it's people are not equal
for some there is a great big wall

What place is this, can you tell?
The United States, though not United very well.....

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These are my thoughts......
Written November 9th, 2006

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  • kittkat2007
    June 6, 2007
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    thnx Krys


  • Angel With No Halo
    June 5, 2007

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    I like the way you told this. It is so true. We will never be united. Why they even call it the UNITED STATES OF AMERICA baffles me. You did well here. I just wish more people coule see this message. Keep it up hon.

    ~Krys~


  • AmazinJason
    November 14, 2006
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    Oh so so true, written very honest and I see it as a call to
    bring people together. I love it, good job.