On Winter's slalom, lies insanity.
A hand you've seen before, stands knocking at Death's door;
It's Numbness. It's Madness. It's Destiny,
A chilling finger uncloaking the threshing floor.
A hand you've seen before, stands knocking at Death's door.
The shrivelling spectre of a phantom, alone.
A chilling finger uncloaking the threshing floor.
Old woman brittle, slumped, gnarled to the bone.
The shrivelling spectre of a phantom, alone,
Unsightly apparition in burial shroud;
Old woman brittle, slumped, gnarled to the bone,
Release the agony long silenced, disavowed.
Unsightly apparition in burial shroud
For centuries reliving death's crippling embrace;
Release the agony, long silenced, disavowed
Retracing the lines on Travesty's pock-marked face.
For centuries reliving death's crippling embrace.
The Pied Piper played on, as she danced to his song;
Retracing the lines on Travesty's pock-marked face,
Careless and free, self-centeredly skipping along.
The Pied Piper played on, as she danced to his song,
As time drifted by, mind flitted like a firefly;
Careless and free, self-centeredly skipping along.
Fate knows the way, the hour you'll die; too late to cry.
As time drifted by, mind flitted like a firefly,
Its chilling finger uncloaking the threshing floor;
Fate knows the way, the hour you'll die; too late to cry.
A hand you've seen before, stands knocking at Death's door.
Its chilling finger uncloaking the threshing floor
Ones passions and greed, the curse of desire;
A hand you've seen before, stands knocking at Death's door
Inciting the Beast...Death's funeral pyre.
Ones passions and greed, the curse of desire:
It's Numbness. It's Madness. It's Destiny.
Inciting the Beast...Death's funeral pyre.
On Winter's slalom, lies insanity.
Author notes
Rounds is okey-dokey or straight: You're the Hostess.
current hair color:red
Your Favorites:kaibab, just mercedes, hopeless dreams, artis
hobbies/activities:theatre, costume and fashion, writing, spiritual growth
color: pink
food
izza & pancakes separately or together
sport:gymnastics and figure skating and dance
tv show:
movie:Rappacinni's Daughter by Nathaniel Hawthorne Dark and Beautiful
animal:cockatiel
fruit:watermelon
candyraeline
ice creamraeline and cream
band:il divo
song:unchained melody
Anything else:sagitarius
Goals for this year?inner peace/ world peace
Goals in life?inner peace
Your fears? fear inself
Your weakness?fear itself
Anything else you want to share?
Enter this contest
Insanity/Death the arch villain of a world gone madly sane
Picture is named : Killing Time
By: Antonisfes
Option #28: Misc. Didn't find the perfect option. Perhaps the option on Death
might work?
USER NAME: liquidmindforever
Homies: "Peaceful Spirit Mom"
Option #4 The Inner "DEMONS"
liquidmindforever
Multiple Personalities Option #13
This is a variation on the Pantoum as I've altered the 6th quatrain and added a 7th and 8th, The 8th is the correct form of the Pantoum using lines 3 and 1 from the first stanza.
Line 2 and 4 become L.1 and 3 in the subsequent verses and the last stanza incorporates the first and fourth lines of the final stanza.
Written November 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- In the Life of Insanity. by AutumnsFlame.
757 points, ended November 3, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Insanity. by Fallen Under Light.
300 points, ended September 26, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - THE MOST INSANELY TEMPTING CONTEST IN THE EXISTENCE OF INSANELY TEMPTING POEMS AND bread by ultimate beluga.
450 points, ended October 11, 2007, 12 entries
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500 points, ended October 7, 2007, 46 entries
Honorable mention
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510 points, ended November 28, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
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600 points, ended December 30, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
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1000 points, ended January 17, 2008, 31 entries
Honorable mention
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900 points, ended August 31, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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1750 points, ended April 14, 159 entries
Honorable mention
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Honorable mention
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700 points, ended July 21, 21 entries
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• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest - Gold And Silver Trophy Poems! by MJ Forgives.
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What did you think
Comments
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P: you do a stunning job with setting up a story and expressing it with unique wording and sentences.
i have no negative feedback or suggestions
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I left this piece feeling strangely numb. The form is good and it reads well. I can not quite explain my feelings on this. I shall ponder if further. In the meantime, it is a good piece. I like it.
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It's Numbness. It's Madness. It's Destiny.
Oh, you are talented. Very dark and makes me think so much of death. Beautiful imagery, a wonderful write.
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WOW. this was really good.
It was...BRAVO!! just WOW! it left me speechless! WOW!! NICELY DONE! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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This could relate to a love lost or to death itself. I also like poe He was beautifully dark. You wrote with a great deal of feeling and I really like the poem Thank you for sharing
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great write thank you for entering.
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First of all, congratulations on winning all those shiny trophies. This is a really excellent Pantoum, with some wonderful imagery and vocabulary, and an original take on the contest prompt with the Insanity/Death arch nemesis of a sane world, of which we could only wish. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
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Wow. I can certainly see how this has won so many trophies... a fantastic write. Thankyou so much for entering, and good luck
Maria
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This is very deep. I couldn't understand if it would stop anyone from ending their life however.
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impressive usage of the form...but some spelling mistakes...
and the poems is really scary...the usage of words adds to the quality...
good luck
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Great write, completely mind blowing.
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I really dislike Pantoums, and at times with a passion. And, the reason is because I can never read one as to where the repetition works. Either the writer is a great writer yet isn't good at being repetitious, or using such a tool, or they are not a good writer, and it just ends up giving me a headache. This is not one of those poems. I found this was a very good Pantoum. It did start getting on my nerves towards the end but it subsided by then because, well, it ended. This is probably the first Pantoum I've ever liked. Which is something.
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You need to check your spelling. You even have some misspelled words in you title. That really isn't cool. Very origional on a more positive note. I loved how discriptive this was. I think this could be great with a bit of work. All great things take a bit of editting
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WOW,
You've certainly won a lot of trophy's with this one.
And it is kinda nasty.
I really liked this pantoum, you did a great job with it. good luck in my contest.
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quite impressive as far as ideas go and vocab, rhyme, and overall originality. "it's numbness. it's madness. it's destiny" doesn't really work for me but that's the only line that stuck out to me like that. i reiterate that it's an impressive work, and i've written one pantoum before and it was really hard. but through much of this your stanzas are made up of 3 or 4 sentence-lines that really end kind of harshly. sometimes it just doesn't flow well at all. also, just my feelings on the title. seems too long and cumbersome to me. but still overall this is great. thanks for entering.
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Wonderful piece, excellent form and flow. A very powerful piece, thanks for this great entry. Hugs, Bunny
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i liked this one in paticular, and loved your vocabulary strewn throughout
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DQ Gold Trophy Winner
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This is fab...the line..
Fate knows the way, the hour you'll die; too late to cry.
really stood out for me in this..no idea why but there ya go....very well written, good luck in the contest with it
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This is stunning poetry! I'm awed by your talent and think it's a bit Poeish. That's a great form and I'm tempted to try it out. I wouldn't have known it was the 'mind of humanity' you were comparing to a Black Hole unless you'd pointed it out. I thought it was death. However this is a chilling and delightful read!
Peace Georgia
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magnificient! wonderful!
nicely written. the rhythm was amazing and the rhyming was awesome! Good Work and good luck! A bookmark most def!
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Thank you for your comments and happy
faces on A CHILLING FINGER-A SHRIVELING
SPECTRE.
Blessings,
liquid
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It's Nunmbness. It's madness. It's Destiny.
Inciting the Beast...Death's funeral pyre.
On Winter's slalom, lies insanity.
I can see the wisdom of the universal truth in the every stanza..you are quite wonderful here..thanks for this amazing work in my contest....
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This was just gorgous! I loved reading it! The rhythm was amazing and I didn't have any awkward hang ups with the flow.. wow.. thanks so much for entering this piece and welcome to my AP Homies!
Jessa♥
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Dear danceswsquirrels,
Thank you for hosting this contest, for the lovely SILVER TROPHY, points and especially
for honoring A CHILLING FINGER-A SHRIVELING
SPECTRE. I'm pleased to be among your AP
family as your AP "Heart Connector." Feel
free to ask for my heartfelt-guidance. I'll be pleased
to be of service to my spiritual AP heart-friend.
LOVELIGHTPEACE
liquid
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for my homies The get cute little designations.. like.. I have an AP Pocket home because I'm his Pocket Pirate.. and I have an AP Liver which is like lover, but we decided Liver was better.. those type of things.. what type of nickname would you want
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woot woot
excellent description skills, it's certainly a smart and contest poem
drifted and flitted link well and flitted like a fire fly worked magnificently
im proud you entered and ta for it too!
adios
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Wonderful job on the poem. I loved your word usage and placement in this. You did a great job. Good luck in the contest.
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i would like to congratulate you on a very well written poem and to wish you the best of luck in this contest which we both have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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"Its chilling finger uncloaking the threshing floor" - my favorite line.
This is my first time to read this poem. I will be re-reading all the entries like I usually do.
Initial score = 9.7
Thanks for sharing and keep on writing my friend.
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This is beautifully invisaged using the chosen form, which I think fits the ideas and imagery perfectly. The repetition adds to the unease, re-inforcing ideas of going insane.
Good write and congrats on bronze.
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This is a fantastic piece and
your rhyme and vocabulary add to the style.
You've talent, Dear Poet. Well done!
~May the ink in your pen flow freely~
Chaos
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You did a good job with this style and the rhyme was very good. (( Rhyming poetry is my style love it ))
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im impressed with your ability with rhyme! i find it difficult myself...
i see how the repetition is a central point of the poem, but i can help feeling like it was used to assist the rhyme? i could be wrong...
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Am I insane hahaha for liking this? lol
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INSANE.
Very creative. Your rhyming is superb. Wow. This is my first entry and it is wonderful. Good job and Good Luck.
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Dear Fallen Under Light,
Thank you for hosting this contest. I thank you for honoring A Chilling Finer--A Shriveling Spectre with the GOLD TROPHY
and the points. Your appreciation of this work is received with gratitude.
LOVELIGHTPEACE
liquid
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WWWoooowwwwww..... this is EXACTLY the kind of poem I was hoping I would get in this contest. my apologies for my comment before this one. In my opinion, this was excellent. Though hard to follow at times, it was beautiful. Thank you very much for entering my contest and good luck.
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Dear Autumnsflame97,
Thank you for honoring A Chilling Finger---
A Shriveling Spectre with the GOLD TROPHY
the points and for hosting this contest.
Your appreciation of this work is received
with gratitude.
LOVELIGHTPEACE
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This was a well thought out poem and well decided on how it was written. Pantoums can be rather difficult to master, but you even extended it and it came out great! Very good write I have to say.
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Dear Cerebral Assassin,
Thank you for dropping in and commenting
on A Shriveling Finger--A Chilling Spectre.
Thanks for the happy faces, too.
Love,
liquid
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Just because I'm nice, I'll give you a warning---
Please put the option number if you would like to enter my contest.
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WHO......
This is definitely interesting and different. I love your word use and the chilling imagery it created. Very well written and done, good luck in teh contest
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hmm great write. quiet interesting. good luck in the contest.
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Dear ...23 clicks,
Thank you for your dropping by to read A CHILLING FINGER...
and for the sooooo fun applause fellow!
Many blessings,
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excellent style and flow. Every line was beautiful and it was very appropriate for this type of poem. good work
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