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Please Believe

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All my life

I have been a dreamer

stretching farther than I believed


Reaching

to see and touch 

a treasure... not yet perceived


Sometimes

earth and mortar

like masonry mansions of the elite


Other times

a darling daughter

a beauty we prayed... to conceive


Sometimes

all on blue paper

then fashioned by craftsman into streets


Always

beyond the present

I recieve it before... it is seen


Each time

reaching farther

what the mind can conceive shall be


Even with you

I`m a believer

loving in faith... who I see


Call me

a hopeless dreamer

for all I have done... I believed


Seeing it all

in my vision

before it was ever... my deed


And for you

my darling lover 

I pray for you...   Please Believe




LeeL


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I say with all my heart, if we can see tommrow, we can believe in today
Written November 9th, 2006

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  • ShelleyA gold member
    January 7, 2007

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    Hi Rick. A beautiful heartfelt write. Lovely imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Vivid descriptives. Excellent word choice. Nice alliteration. I like the romance of the piece. You are a dreamer who has touched my heart through your words. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read. Shelley


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    December 18, 2006
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    i do believe
    and i know that all i seek,
    shall be.
    thank you for helping me see.

    joyce


  • jjbreunig3
    December 16, 2006
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    A delightful write...

    A delightful write; dreamers keep the world an interesting place; nicely done.

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 12, 2006
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    Thank you becky for reading and believing my words, Rick


  • November 12, 2006
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    <3 it

    yes thts so true. my friend always tells me.:i am not afraid of tomorrow for i have seen yesterday, and loved today.: never relli new wat he ment till now..thx for the brilliant write xx becky xx


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 11, 2006
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    Thank you for seeing into my words so well. I may send a link to you that may explane my thoughts further,

    Rick


  • autumns tears
    November 11, 2006
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    This is so revealing, so personal, so pure! I am in awe of your
    talent in theis piece, it is just amazing! I absolutely adore this poem, am so glad I came back by! Thanks for the great reads today! Autumn


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 11, 2006
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    Demsky, Have hope my sweet, we are surrounded by future lovers all carring the same dream, yet now unseen

    Thank you for reading my words, Rick


  • RedTalon
    November 11, 2006
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    Beautiful, my friend. Words from the heart. It reminds me of a John Lennon song "Imagine" with the lyrics "Some people say I'm a dreamer". I think the way you used the ellipsis is quite wonderful. Great work. I always like to see that love exists for one and all. It gives me hope.


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    Just reading this writing and your comment again. As I know you more, your words carry more meaning. If you will love, think of the verse, "Faith of a mustered seed" and the words written just before and after, in The Book.

    Love Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    Hi trista, I have it down to three now and I need the last two realy bad...lol.. If I can find a spacer verse to put more distance between the last two it may help. That is the off side of writing directly, I miss that. This is one of the things that bug me about rhyme, in this theam I ware the EEE sound out.

    Seeee why I like Free Verse

    I like just writing what comes in my head and never have to be interupted by thoughts of construction or repitition... Freeee

    Your the best Dear

    Mr Rickie.com
    Edited on Nov 10, 9:05 p.m. because 'Multiable spelling errors'.


  • trista gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    Hi Hon,
    Just reading again. I don't remember exactly how it ended before, but I have some concerns over using the word "believe" or some form of it 5 times in poem that has such an economy of words. It is still quite beautiful, but if you decide to further "tweak" this as I know you are prone to do, maybe think of a few alternatives? Once in the beginning and again at the end would tie it together nicely. Just a suggestion as always. Either way, I know Joyce will love it however it is written.

    much love,
    ~J.

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    One more thing Trista, I tweeked the end till it now fits in

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    Just reading your comment again and feeling blessed, that I call you my Friend

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    Thank you Linda, I wanted to tell my love a story about beliefe.

    Rick


  • poet2angels gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    This is beautiful, Rick!
    Your love and longing comes through in every line...Your poems are always a breath of fresh air

    Lynda


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    Poet of the Heart, to be anyones favorite is a wonderfull honer.
    That is a great comment in ot`s self. Thank you for liking my words, Rick


  • Poet of the heart 2
    November 9, 2006
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    Wow- I really liked how you wrote this one. The poem was written very well and also had a great flow. I could tell this one was written from your heart -n- soul. Keep up the good work and never stop writing my poet buddie You're one of my favorite poets just too let you know
    Jynnette


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Trista, Now that is a responce to a poem...lol

    You my dear probally know me the best of any on this site, and I always honer your amazing insite and femine wisdom. That is why I picked you as my AP wife, one of my better decisions...lol

    I know you always like when I rhyme. To me it is a very confinding form of the art. I did it here for simplisity.

    I want to thank you for calling me an increadable man.
    That is very kind for you to say. Actually I am very average,
    it is this mind that God gave me to make up for my not being a six footer, that comes up with all the clever stuf. I am just here for the ride.

    I love the words I have written for Joyce. I always know the less direction I have to give in the compisition, the more they are being created in my heart. It has been my pleasure to watch her grow in happyness in our love. I care not what path she may take so long as the end, is where I am standing.

    Thoes are my thoughts. Again, I thank you for you words of wisdom to me.

    Your AP Husband, Rick

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  • trista gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Dear Rick,
    I really don't understand why you normally shy away from rhyming poetry when you do it so well. In this piece especially it is subtle and gentle, very soothing to the ear, rather dreamy even, as I believe someone else already mentioned. This is simply a beautiful piece of work, another that I will add to my favorites of yours. But beyond the technical points is the message...

    I think you are one of few people who really do know where you are going, or at least where you want to go. Your faith in love, in your dream, is so rare in my experience. Most people are hindered by fears. I've even heard it said that almost 90% of the decisions we make in life are made out of fear. Often this proves to be detrimental to us, but other times it brings us where we need to be and protects us from getting hurt worse than we've already been. Taking that giant leap of faith is difficult for most people because they see how much they have to lose. You on the other hand...see little more than what you have to gain. Is the risk worth it? We only know the answer after we've taken the chance. I think the saddest thing is when we're left with the "what if's" and "what could have been's", never knowing if our full potential to love and be loved was reached or not. And...if we move into a love relationship with too many doubts about ourselves or the other person, we have the ability to sabotage the entire thing even before we've given it a chance to work. It may not be done on purpose, usually isn't in fact, but the subconscious mind is more powerful than we often give it credit for.

    You are an incredible man for the trust and faith you are able to put into a woman. If you really believe all you have written, don't lose hope just yet. Offer Joyce your hand in faith and love, then give her the time she needs to find her own faith, whatever it may be.

    Much love always,
    ~J.


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Dasie, I wanted to words to be imposing and inperical, but with a soft delivery, for my friend. I hope my words are clear, Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    SilverButterfly, Thank you for saying God Bless You. For who I am and where I have been, my faith in tommrow is quite good, Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Razor-Kiss, thank you for your wonderfull words on my writing.
    I usally write in Free Verse and sometimes I do push the rhyme scheem a bit. I was impressed with the words on your page.

    I will read more later. If you want to see my Free Verse, try
    "Forever and a Day" on the last page, Rick

  • Razor-Kiss
    November 9, 2006
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    wow...took my breath away

    Wow, this is a lovely write. Beautiful word choice. At first I wasnt sure I liked the rhyming, it sounded a little forced but as it continued, it actually just drew me into the piece even more. Wonderful thought and I love that backround with the candle, so simple yet so powerful. Those who believe are the light when all other lights have gone out. This piece has an incredibly powerful message displayed so simply "Please Believe..." It kind of reminds me of a children pleading..."just a chance that maybe well find better days" [ goo goo dolls] anyways, love the piece, keep it up an write your heart out!


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Tia, I an with you and have changed the last verse several times trying not to destroy the meaning. I am one short fraze short of the Blip, Look later and it may be gone...lol...

    and Yes, I believe in the promis of the days I have not lived.

    Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Lysia, Thank you for the kind words, Rick


  • soulfultia gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    good

    Well another beautiful piece from you my friend. Always a gentle flow through your reads, just lovely. I did stumble over the last line in the 10th stanza, it just did not have same flow, I love the "concept of thought" for the line, just not the flow of the wording. Anyway, that was my thought. This was a nice way to start the day, jut reading uplifting work about love! You are a believer and a man who knows what it is like to be lin love! Another nice pen, Keep up the good work ~Tia


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Red, thank you for reading and liking my writing, Rick

    PS: This is not the lost good thing I have written, Please read again sometime


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Love and Ausom are two good words to hear from a reader. Never loose site of your dream, or on that day, you are just walking slowely to death. Always Believe, Rick
    Edited on Nov 09, 10:26 because 'Spelling'.


  • Acronym
    November 9, 2006
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    OMGoshness I love this alot its really good
    Its butiful lol love it, keep writing


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    My lovely Joyce, if we truly fear the furture we are parlized for life, for every day is the future being lived by the moment we are in. To you I give my hand and ask again, please walk with me in faith together. I always know where I am going and I will be your caring guide, if you will give me that lead in trust. I see and believe in wonderfull days not yet lived by us.

    Your friend and love, Richard Lee


  • daisybee
    November 9, 2006
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    I liked this, it was positive and strong despite seeming quite fragile in its layout. I liked the contrast between the pretty words and the strength of your message. Nice, (in a non bland way).


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    what a lovely write! filled with love faith and hope for the future.You certainly have a way with the pen!!! GBY


  • Sumthinlifeish
    November 9, 2006
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    OMG! I LOVE LOVE LOVE this! EXCELLENT! I can't even say exactly what I like. I just love it. My fav. part is:
    "Call me
    a hopeless dreamer
    for all that I have done... I believed"

    Thats awesome and I have often been called a hopeless dreamer so I really relate. AWESOME write! I'm gonna book mark it!

  • Jai Lysia
    November 9, 2006
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    This poem is so beautiful, I wish I could write like you. Very lovely read, thank you for sharing it.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    beautiful

    very precious, soft and loving.
    i have no favorite part, i love the whole thing.
    i wish i was a believer like you.
    i have a lot of faith you know i do,
    so why is my life so full of doubt???
    help me to believe and dream as you do.
    this is a wonderful poem
    with a great message.
    talk to you soon.

    you have my love joyce

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Anaiya, thank you for saying great work, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    I just read the last part of your comment

    You are correct, read my motto, Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Scotslass, I thank you for the spelling changes. My personel Spelling Farie was sleeping when I published this...lol..
    The stanza you picked is very perceptive, the whole setup of the writing, is to support these words...

    Even with you
    I`m a believer
    loving in faith... all I see

    and the last stanze is the conclusion of it all, "To Believe".

    I thank you, Rick


  • Anaiya
    November 9, 2006
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    Great work, loved it, well done


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Michelle, thank you for hearing my positive voice. I earn a living being positive...LOL Liked your comment, Rick


  • ScotsLass
    November 9, 2006
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    It's a beautiful premise and I love the set up. There are a couple of places where it seems to me you've misspelled some words (although I'm not sure if I'm missing something because no one else has picked up on it) streaching -- did you mean stretching? preceived -- did you mean perceived? Also, conceived (to keep in line with your tense) would need to be conceive.

    Loved this stanza: Even with you

    I`m a believer

    loving in faith all I see

    ~ ~ ~

    A wee suggestion for this part -- Call me

    a hopeless dreamer

    for all that I have done(,) I believed

    With regards to the premise and content, it's extremely beautiful. The tone is soft and dreamy which adds to the idea. And just for the record, I hear you completely lol, believing is half the battle


  • michellemybelle gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Lovely. It is a joy hearing (and feeling) your soft, yet confident, possitive voice. :-) A beautiful way to start the day.
    Michelle


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Morning Terry, is it realy 6am..??..LOL I changed the name and colors and detailed it further. Please look again cause my Spelling Fairy is asleep.

    You need not comment, I thank you in advance, Richard Lee

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  • JoyfulWriter
    November 9, 2006
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    Such an awesome piece of work here, Rick....I always enjoy reading and feeling your words...keep them coming...smiles, Terry

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