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The Handsome Tradesman

He lay dormant,


his mind swimming in the scent


of decaying flesh;


the perfume of his lust.


 

And like the volcano that sleeps quietly


(fooling those who wish not to see


the soft bubbles boiling gently),


his loins awakened


a new day’s thirst.


 

Eyes so blue


defied the deathly blackness


hidden expertly


by his handsome façade.


 

So when he called her


she felt no burn from the molten lava;


instead she saw butterflies


floating on the breeze.


 

When his cloth met her breath,


a dizziness engulfed her teenage mind


and she waltzed…


…softly into no man’s land.


 

If only she could have stayed there


for then she would never have felt the sharpness


of his knife as he carved in her


a new doll for him to play with.


 

And he would play…


… and play


until that final stroke;


 

he would not stop


until the doll


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Written November 8th, 2006

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  • requiempoet gold member
    November 9, 2006
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    Great poem!!! awesome i love the last lines.