Tired back of rice fields;
empty plates are ready for
Thanksgiving prayer.
Author notes
Haiku
GT: allpoetry.com/Contest/2320767
Written November 8th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- A Piece of the Orient by B Chandler.
400 points, ended November 12, 2006, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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tired? doesn't make sense
back from the rice fields
my plate is still empty
pray for rain -
Amazing haiku! It certainly brings the image of Asia in my mind!
Thank you for entering and good luck! -
Excellent! Within few words you ve given the Themes of Starving,Thankfulness and Prayers.The reality of the farmers'life is clearly picturised. Really touching!
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Thank you dear sanjay kanna for your kind comment.
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Congratulations on winning gold with your beautiful Haiku. I was very happy to see that your talents extend into yet another area of expression.
blessings
sam
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Outstanding
I thought this was very creative with unexpected images creating a miniture insight into one part of the orient culture. I loved your choice of words, especially the reference to Thanksgiving at the end giving a spiritual context to the poem. I thought this poem achieved a lot in so few words. -
Thanks for comment. Interesting how sometimes comments are mch longer than poem. I am glad if you like my haiku.
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Sonja, A nice and apt write
reminds me of some of my favorites over the years; A selection of ones I have seena nd loved
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On this day
there is quiet
and in the great empty spaces
god is crying the oceans
even now
he knows of the days to follow.
fini
When i saw you last
so many months ago
i didn't know you at all
we were both so obscured
by layers of other people
and unrealized dreams
now you shape my world warm in your soft outline
and color it in your very green eyes.
fini
The mixture of welcome and reserve
in your open body
still color in your face
when you see me looking at you
though i see the smile too
and your hands
moving us closer together.
fini
JD
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hi my dear Sonja
A nice short poem.
Wish you luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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VERY BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN
You have captured the essance so beautifully
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Dear Sonja;
Your Haiku is lovely and so very visual. In this short verse you manage great scope. The Asian urban experience is expressed aptly in your poem. I wish you the very best in the contest, and welcome you as my 'running mate' anytime.
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