Sitting among the moonlit shadows,
one can see a lovers silhouette.
There is one who belongs to another,
embraced by someone who was just met.
Their bodies intertwined together,
passion stealing a moment in time.
Neither one belonging in this place,
deceit to be their ultimate crime.
For there is one at home waiting,
suspecting a lover to be untrue.
Once smiling eyes now left crying,
by a deceitful one just like you.
Yes I know, have for some time,
did you think you concealed it well?
The late calls, cologne, the after hours,
I just hadn't found a way to say farewell.
Yet tonight I sat among the shadows,
being betrayed by a lovers silhouette.
You made love to her, kissed her beyond
embraced in her arms, me you did forget.
Suddenly my warm heart became so very cold ,
as you defiled the words spoken at the chapel.
I stood tall, dried my eyes, knocked on the door,
Said, "This is the last time,I'm done,go to hell!"
A contest entry
- The Cheaters Club by alaskanamber.
450 points, ended February 14, 2008, 24 entries
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I really liked the piece. I do think they think of us even when they are cheating. I really loved everything but the last line. It doesn't seem to fit with the flow of the rest of the poem. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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The contest rules stated no end line rhyme. This is being removed from the contest for violating that rule.
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I wasn't looking for rhyme but at least you did it well. The first three stanzas stood out the most, I thought they could have stood on their own. Thanks for entering.
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eyesofanangel524~
Hey! I thought that this was a really good piece...it hits close to home...this is what my friend whom were together were doing to each other...crazy...Keep on writing, I hope to stumble across some more of your work soon.
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Thank you my dear. Was a long time ago..and he still asks me to take him back. Silly man. Still dont know which I liked better..the scrap or the replay in different text. What ya think? lol
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well done!
Gall durn it! Cain't member wha I'd typed in'ere afor.
Something like...
There is a time and place for everything, his time has been reached. Much meaning and heartache written of here. A cheatin heart shall never find fulfillment, but forever be seeking that which it already had.
Very good structure and rhyme. Well written piece.
Be well and be blessed. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Mouser
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