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Awakened

Left with your heart in my hand
Shall I crush it?
Would you like it back?
I think not, you don't deserve it
Remove yourself from my sight
Before I suffocate your life force

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Written on 5th May 2003 at 04:10 GMT

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  • Forgot2Breathe
    May 17, 2006
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    *protects heart* Im gonna stay on your good side


  • bwalker
    May 17, 2006
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    well ummm it was an ok poem


  • Kain
    June 19, 2005
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    Somehow, this is how I am feeling. Are you the one holding my heart? Are you the one crushing it? If you are, please stop. I cannot take it anymore.

    Always, but not forever.


  • Danna Hobart
    May 5, 2003
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    Yikes.... not gonna give it back, huh? Just gonna dangle it and tease them with it? Better yet, why not just stick it in your chest cavity... you seem to be lacking one.

    (Actually, it is a good poem)