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My thoughts are weak
Let me die alone
I don't need you
I will save myself
I am not afraid
You control me no longer

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Written on 5th May 2003 at 04:02 GMT

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  • -LizBTropez-
    November 10, 2005
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    Echoes how I felt when escapring from my abusive ex husband... I felt weak at first but then got stronger. Short poem but packed with emotion, and I'm sure others have felt this way- I hope perhaps reading this might give them strength.


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    September 2, 2005
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    I kind of hear a little Evanescence in the lines 'I don't need you I can save myself' I like it. Very short but to the point and very powerful message. You get a lot of meaning out of a few words. They words chosen are for maximum affect and are so intense to carry all the meaning you want it to have. Thanks for sharing

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • September 2, 2005
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    Well its the message and voice that counts here and well it really does say a lot in a short stance.. but come on now lets expand it, bring out the hate the anger the rage that provoked this piece. lets see it now..


  • September 2, 2005
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    ive felt like this before. that whole f off and die leave me the hell alone i dont need you you stupid cheap.... m. uh.... lol. yh ive felt like this before. somehow somewhere you dig up the strength. and like they say, this too shall pass. its alot easier to be miserable than to be happy. it takes a stronger heart and the better one carrys on. i guess you have to think of it like... i was looking for someone when i found you. (that always gets em in the gut hehe or nut oops) the people who care aobut you, see the best in you. the people who dont, just dont know a good thing when they see it. its their loss.


  • Kain
    April 9, 2005
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    Yes. This is power. Strength. The Laura I once knew. Bring her back, do not be afraid. For I am here to help you along your way. Trust me, for once, please trust me...


  • Joe Spencer
    September 10, 2003
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    I like this.. I think you should exand it.. Get your feelings out! It is extremely sad though too.. I don't think anyone should control anyone. This poem may be what I was just thinking about. A girl's or boy's virginity how guys and girls use people to get what they want. I hope this isn't the case. Because I truly don't understand why people do this.

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