Happy happy joy joy,
Running over little boys,
Drag the bodies to the lake,
Clean the blood without mistake.
Spin in circles til you hurl,
Stabbing many little girls,
Throw the corpses in the fire,
Sate your now insane desire.
Burn a hospital with screams of pride,
When the police come, run and hide,
Your demons are free to ruin earth,
So make them give you a wide berth.
Destroy them all with your hand,
Raze and scorch all the land,
Never stop and wonder why,
As they scream and curse and die.
Laughing merrily in your mirth,
You brought to life a hell on earth.
Author notes
Option.....DARK! (#1) Illusion!
This is not my usual type of work...just had a moment of pure dark insight really lol... tell me what you think other than OMG its so evil! hehe....
Written November 7th, 2006
A contest entry
- Options relating to groups I'm in by Jinxgirl.
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I would say this is a scary halloween scene to be sure. You may want to mark this under adult so the wee ones cannot read it it. But it is very well written and quite spooky indeed.
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niiiiice i like it. it flows very well, the colors i'm not so big on... but it was a good poem. thx for entering.
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Very good write, thank you for entering the contest. whisper
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It's well written, and definitely has a really sick humor thing going on, but doesn't close well. It seems to be dark just for the fun of it, without much else behind it. I'd expand it a bit; give it a little more depth.
Thanks for the birthday present- and sorry it took me so long to comment!
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LMAO!!! i loved it...this just made my day. lol While i was reading it i was kinda putting it to a beat and i was just bobbin' my head to it. Its so wrong and dark and evil but damn i love it. great piece. lol
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Twisted
OMG!Its so evil hehe...No i'm just kidding...Very good! It is so untastefuly dark! Killing children and burning bodies...If i ever need something really disturbingly dark i know who to come to! Thanks for joining my contest and good luck!!! -
OMG! I freaking love this!! that makes me sound like such a sick person, lol, but I really do! I LOVE it! it rhymes great, has a sadistic gleeful nursery rhyme chant sound to it. awesome, just awesome. and so vivid and yet scarily funny. lol. great job!
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a cheerful little dark peice of poetry lol had me tapping my foot
good luck in the contest. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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excellent
Very well done indeed, not to crazy about some of the images your words put into my head. But you did an excellent job with the delivery. This piece put me in mind of a song or chant that you would find in a horor movie. Not at all what I expected to find from the title.
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wickedly awsome
evil does not even begin to dicribe this it's totally psycoticly, wickedly insane, i love it it is wicked clown worthy, i have to bookmark this......you may not tempt the dark side much but some of us live there from time to time......DHK
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Excellant/intriguing
Wow, well done indeed. Imagery: very good. Emotional impact: High. Liked entire poem. No one part was favored over another one. Again very well done. -
Well....first off...."OMG ITS EVIL!"
But seriously now, lol, 'hell on earth,' it's a REALLY strong term. And, I honestly love it! At first, it scared me cause murdering children has somehow always frightened me even though I dont like kids too much. But you kept building on that and adding things that were worse and worse and worse, then ending it with 'hell on earth.' I love this poem, it started with a great idea and ended jsut as well.
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