Faceless I smile
Faceless I see
Faceless I wreck
Havoc upon thee
Without words I speak
Without words I destroy
Without words I am the heroine
Of this forgotten story
With no love I will kiss
With no love I do what I do
With no love I will continue
To forever hold you
Missing thoughts I ensue chaos
Missing thoughts I dance in the trees
Missing thoughts I jump to fly
Not knowing what I shall be
Unmasked you see my faceless face
Unmasked I am exposed to all
Unmasked I tatter on the edge
Balancing on the verge of the fall
Unbound I raise from this
Unbound I am released
Unbound I roam this earth
Forever known as the beast
Author notes
The "mask" or image we present to the world. Designed to make a particular impression on others, while concealing our true nature.
Written November 7th, 2006
A contest entry
- Anything Today by Spooky Black Wolf.
300 points, ended November 6, 2006, 23 entries
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Wow. I love the flow and refrain of this poem. Just really makes it awesome. The rhymes are also good and the message itself is just great. Nice poem!
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Repetitive but interesting. I like some of the aspects you crafted in this. Keeps the reader interested.
'Unmasked you see my faceless face
Unmasked I am exposed to all
Unmasked I tatter on the edge
Balancing on the verge of the fall'
Very clever phrasing and basic rhyme but such a beautiful piece. -
Put together nicely and has a great theme. One thing, first stanza: 'wreck' should be 'wreak' for correct spelling. Also, personally, the lack of punctiation really hindered the flow of this poem, but I understand that this may just be your creative way. Still, for me, it was a little bumpy.
Once again, great theme and good use of repetition, just a few things to fix here and there. Cheers. -
Wow i really like this poem it is full of emotion and truth. You are a great writter. My fav. Part is
With no love I will kiss
With no love I do what I do
With no love I will continue
To forever hold you
Great job keep up the good work
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I love this its so so true i do it I have created this image that I am this evil/unforgiving ass hole but realy im a loving shallow ass hole lol any way nice work i like this you did a great job
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splendid
That actually sounds tame for you. My Wee Beastie. That's right your mine now. I won't let you go. I'll stalk you if I have to. -
WOAH!!!! that was frigging amazing!!
mind-blowing!
so dark.. so weird! loved the imagery! loved the words.. the flow.. the beat of it.. the flow!
wow!
this was truely breath-taking!
u should definitely win with this one!
"With no love I will kiss
With no love I do what I do
With no love I will continue
To forever hold you"
amazing!!!
~rana~ -
Bloody hell Chef? This is immensely powerful. Love the form you have adopted. It re-enforces the gravitas of each last line. Superb piece. Great flow. Really strong.Bravo!
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