i look out the window
press my face against the glass
feel the cold seep through my skin
to my heart
i see children
frolicking and playing
all winter is to them
is a snow day
a sledding hill
a Christmas present
but for me
winter
is a memory
a feeling
a part of me
the frozen trees
the world painted white for a fresh start
what i wish to be
clean
new
refreshed
and ready to melt away
and show a new me
as different from what i used to be
as spring is from fall
as flowers are
from fallen leaves
different and yet the same
a leaf falling
the end of me
a flower blooming
the beginning of me
winter
fall
spring
summer
Me
Author notes
winter a new year a time to come clean
Written November 7th, 2006
A contest entry
- Winter Scapes by XavierShardae.
500 points, ended November 8, 2006, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the sun comes up by ray10444.
300 points, ended December 15, 2006, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Best of the Best Season Three Preliminary by B Chandler.
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It's good though a little to happy for my taste. As I was reading it, I started to imagine a different ending that would make it like Love Like Winter.
Good Job!
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Nice, taking seasons and making them feel seasonal, freakin' shweet (Sean Connery Style). -
I took what you said and decided to check this write out, glad i did. I enjoyed reading it, especially the lines
world painted white for a fresh start
what i wish to be
clean
new
refreshed
and ready to melt away
and show a new me
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"When Bunnies Attack the inner sanctum of other fluffy things"
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Good
Really liked how you wrote this. I especially like the lines:
and show a new me
as different from what i used to be
I love winter because of all the things you described!
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wow wow wow!!!! The imagery.... you have painted a visual picture with your flow of words.....
well done... thank you for sharing this wonderful poem
Tracey -
kkkooolll i love it
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Thanks!
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I like this poem. There have been so many times when I have looked out of the window and pressed my face up against the glass like this. This really spoke to me. Thanks!
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My favorite part of this is the end. Full of short yet powerful words to express the changing of a spirit amidst the changing of a season.
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greatness
Amazing flow, but also wonderful imigary, like i could just picture u while your writing this, probably look out ur window at a bunch of kids sledding and thats a cool thing to be able to do that, great job
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Very well done flow was great
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