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..but knowing he never did

I shushed him up when I
didn't want to know;

I ignored him when he
called me sweet names;

I cried when he was worried about me,
even when I tried not to care,

but knowing-
he never did.

          say your 'Amen' to
          every serious word escaping
          from this mouth

I'd sleep nights without him
knowing where I was;

I'd live days without him
knowing with who I was,

but lying I never did

          say your 'Amen' to
          every little action I did
          and forgive me
          in the name of the Father-
          the Son and the Holy Ghost

I lay resting on his chest
but never felt safe;

I kissed him, just to
make him shut up;

I forgave him if he cheated,
since I never did else

But just the knowing-
he never did

         Touch me with your fingers of truth
         Truth and trust
         but never make me tell
         for only God has to know
         of what he doesn't know
         and isn't going to figure out

Author notes

currently listening:
Unsere Vater - E nomine
Justin Timberlake - Cry me a river
3 days grace - I hate everything about you
Letters to Cleo - three small words
Spiderbait - sun on my window


I'm sorry about the Christian background in this ...
this piece is not based on anything in my life.. not directly at least.. hope it is relatable ..

haha, btw: you guess where it's about.. ^^
Enjoy!
Omichi

Edit: Editting this poem over and over again, because of re-writing. Im sorry.. It's improving!
Written November 7th, 2006

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  • Todmeister
    November 7, 2006
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    I actually like the vaguely Christian element, it gives the piece more emphasis, especially the amen bits.

    As nice as the poem is though, I don't like what it represents - but I guess you could just say it's like.

    Anyways - the wording seems a bit clumsy at times, going through it carefully might produce a few changes for the good, but apart from that - pretty cool write.