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Time

I'm sorry
That I can't
Say it back..

..Yet..


I don't say it,
Until I really mean it..

But that doesn't mean,
That I don't care
About you


I just struggle to
t.r.u.s.t
Like that.


I know I can do this,
I just need a little

..t.i.m.e..


Time, suspended in mid-air,
Like the tears I can not
...::c.r.y::...




I'm sorry I can't say it,
So I'm writing this to let you know..

There's still hope,
That I will one day,
But for now
I just need
A little more

..:t.i.m.e:..







"Don't be wreckless with other people's hearts, and don't put up with people who are reckless with yours" - Famous Proverb.

Author notes

For my boyfriend. <3
Written November 7th, 2006

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  • purple wings
    November 7, 2006
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    great write.keep it up.


  • xXxThat GurlxXx
    November 7, 2006
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    SilkenRose~
    Hey! First off I would like to say thank you for the comment on my poem "False Life". I like this poem a lot...I know what it's like...Keep on writing...I hope that I stumble across some more of your writes soon.
    ~!~Manda~!~


  • Strawberry Roan
    November 7, 2006
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    personal, and i admire the truth. good moral to have as well, the quote at the end, and the gneral message.
    i think there's a quietened feeling of sadness and desperation in this, but it is still a happy hopeful poem anyway. my opinion, probably wrong xxxxxx x


  • macandrew
    November 7, 2006
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    This is well written. The bits of "art" within I thought added a nice touch.

    John


  • masterblaster gold member
    November 7, 2006
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    Hi, nice little poem with lovely feel, did not think you needed all the dots in between letters they would stand well without them, but that is a peronal opinion and the poem is yours, all the best, Di

  • Philogos gold member
    November 7, 2006
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    I like the honesty of this piece. You don't coos e what you believe or when to trust. Everything in its own time. Also, leaving them wanting more never did any harm. Well written. vic


  • Tiffany Turner
    November 7, 2006
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    amazing

    hey,

    this is an amazing peice i love it i can relate. i hope that he

    understands. cause the arse of a guy that i dated when he found

    out i couldnt say it back he turned in to a arsehole and jsut

    left me for one of my friend sorry i just needed to vent. keep

    up the amazing work. i love it. and as i said i can relate.


    Tiffany

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