At birth it was known
That I was looked down upon
As nothing but the bearer
Of a daughter or a son.
I am weak and I am frail.
I am nothing compared to you.
My simple mind cannot withstand
Your tremendous wit and couth.
But it was SHE whom you leeched from.
SHE built your mind from dust.
SHE taught you how to feel and love.
SHE enlightened you with trust.
Yet you flatter yourself with credit
For the likes of humanity.
Although, you and yours would not exist
If it were not for me.
So take notice to the influence
That we have placed inside your lives
We are more than just your bitches,
Your slaves,
Your trophy wives.
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Written November 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- anything goes. by warrior-eagle.
600 points, ended October 3, 2007, 50 entries
Silver trophy winner
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"... you flatter yourself with credit
For the likes of humanity.
Although, you and yours would not exist
If it were not for me"
Powerful! Speaking from such a place of strength on Womanhod!
Women don't often get the credit they deserve for their contribution to the history of humankind. I love it! ....JustBreathe
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We are more than just your WOMEN,
Your slaves,
Your trophy wives.
YEs we are.This is excellent.Cmpletely love it. -
excellent!! As a woman, I'm in full support of the message here! Thank you for this entry! Iloved it!! take care, Sam (Dreams27) xxx
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yes. we are just as great as the "almighty" man, and the fact that all life wouldn't happen if it weren't for us makes us even greater...can you imagine a guy with PMS or with the 9 month prison sentence (yes, i know it leads to greater and happier days when the baby arrives, but come on: swollen feet which you can not see, having to be helped up and down, waddling, being very hot, morning sickness, and other things make pregnancy a mild prison sentence)...we are much more than incubators for children...much more
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exactly. we are more than just house wives; we are the ones who let them live and think that they are all powerful.
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it bother me to see your error WE are more than just your Woman should be WE are more then just your women!or I am more then just your woman? -
I love this poem, and not to take away from the rest, but the third stanza was my favorite, which I suspect is about his mother. I think the switch between "she" and "I" seems to work, because you use "we" in the last stanza. The only part that might take away from that is the last line in the forth stanza, which reverts back to "me". That aside, I loved this piece, and always enjoy reading "women's rights" work.
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Great write; I loved the emotion that created within the piece. Great Job!
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Has Teeth
This is a very potent " I am Woman hear me Roar" write.
I liked alot about this, it is clear in its intenet and in its meaning , it carries a great slap at where it is aimed.
The only thing I had a problem with was the "I " and then "She " , " We " factor. I understand where you are going with it but it does make the read itself a bit disjointed.
please feel free to ignore the above it is only an oppinion.
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I love it!
hey! this was reallly good, i'm all for womans rights and i completely agree with the subject! good job!
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