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With you

The most brutal of conditions that keeps us apart
but know, forever you have my heart
For every day that we are apart
my love for you grows in leaps and bounds

To be with you and hold you
to be with you and touch you
to be with you and kiss you
to be with you and love you

In the distance to you nothing is lost
In the distance to you it stays the same

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Written November 6th, 2006

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  • Thayla
    February 1, 2008

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    Good

    Thanks for the comment. This is a good poem. The repetition is a little over kill and the ending makes is a bit of a let down. But the over all feeling of the poem is great and this sounds like a forever love. Well done!!


  • purple wings
    November 6, 2006
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    great write indeed.


  • xXxThat GurlxXx
    November 6, 2006
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    IamtheDragon~
    Hey! I thought that this was a really good write. It like how you kept it short. Keep on writing and I hope to read some more of your writes soon.
    ~!~Manda~!~