Well isn’t this a shock to the system
You’re gone and I didn’t have the courage
To tell you what I wanted
To tell you how you moved my world like a hurricane
I need for you to know this
Before you belong to someone else
I can’t shake the feeling that there’s more to this than what I first discovered
Can you feel the heat?
It’s burning through my veins
Like life into my heart
It’s where you are
Can you chase the silence?
It’s written in the sky
Like a candle in the dark
It’s where you are
So take a breath, take it all
I’ve let you take me with you
But this starving realization hurts
I don’t believe I waited just too long
I need for you to know this
Before you belong to someone else
It’s not for me to choose if I want to be your safety blanket
Can you feel the heat?
It’s burning through my veins
Like life into my heart
It’s where you are
Can you chase the silence?
It’s written in the sky
Like a candle in the dark
It’s where you are
Still I can hear your voice
Detached yet comforting
I wish that I could kill the distance
That makes me feel so cold
Author notes
again, it's just a case of opening the vault and trying to make sense of some feelings right now...
Written November 6th, 2006
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haha. well thanks love, i appreciate your reading this. im sure these uni holidays will give me reason to fight someone so keep your eyes peeled. not too sure about sweden but we'll see...
tara
ps. i used to have aggression in my pieces... not extreme sword fights or death by torture but i really did used to be angry lol...
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ok theyre not that angry. but i usually don't get mad.. i get even...
i'm gonna be checking some of your stuff soon. i haven't read your writing in aaaaaaages. hooray.
tara
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Surely is good to see you writing again, very nice work, and the imagery really is striking. The emotions in this piece are very vivid, but they also set me on edge (they're just so passive-aggressive...) - I find myself wishing you'd written a poem about beating someone up, or at least being the jerk doing the heartbreaking. THAT would be an experience. From a purely artistic standpoint, the fact that I actually responded to the poem in this way is most likely a mark in your favour - *sigh*. All in all, excellent write, strong emotions, I'm so happy to see you're back again - (Please write me a poem about you beating someone up on a Swedish Holiday)
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thanks for reading! it seems youre a bit of a renthead? salute to that...
i have a rough melody in my head but i dont know if i will be bothered to actually get it together lol. at this point its a big enough deal that im actually writing again, but i will see how it goes...
thanks again for taking the time to comment
tara -
This is a great write...you can really understand some of the feelings you were feeling when you wrote it..I think it would sound awsome if it actually had music to it..well done..a really great write.
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