As I walk through this life down a lonely road
waiting for you to return
My love for you is a fire that is bound to burn
I remember the way you used to smile
when we sat at the diner and talked for awhile
I think of the times you cried
and the times you dried my eyes
I remember how you saved my life that day
Then I left to go my own way
Two years later we met again
Remembering the one that I called friend
I thought that lonely roads was now built for two
For awhile I walked and fell in love with you
Then someone started a fight
You left, my angel, you left my life....
Again....
I love you my friend
I'll walk this lonely road till we meet again
Waiting for you to walk beside me with love
For you will always be my princess, my angel,
my dove
Alas I see you love me no more
You left my heart broken, shattered, scattered upon the floor
Tears of crimson stream down my sweet face
As one last time you leave this place.
Author notes
Dedicated to some one who was my lover, my friend, and at that time the light of my life; who died of lukimia.
A contest entry
- You're Gone--x by Atrophya.
500 points, ended January 29, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oh my god--i was close to tears, this is too beautiful.
god. im so sorry, may she rest in peace.
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heartfelt
i also remember this beautiful and heartfelt poem that you dedicated to our dear friend...i remember you telling me about the tragedy and reading this to me on the phone and me reading it from your poetry book...i know that she was truely a great love in your life and no matter where life takes any of us that she will always be with you cos the bond that you two had was more powerful than the bond between us.
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Wow yeah this is wonderful, how you manage to always get so much emotion to flow through the whole thing is just unbelieveable. You are a true poet, a wonderful writer.
Its a really sad poem but at the same time really lovely. Everything worked really well and you can feel so much emotion its weird haha (in a good way)
Keep it up (you don't need to be told because you will anyway)
Emma
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IOh wow this was a powerful piece you penned here dear poet.
Well done. I can feel the sadness and the sorrow...this was well done.
Best wishes to you
Tory
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ummm very good,inill is until but who cares I saw the love and the pleeeing you might have done1 very good!
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Nicely written.
Wow, this is a very very sad, and just wow. I really liked how you've written this poem your an amazing poet. Where'd you get the idea for this poem? Hope it's nothing personal, lol you spelled one word wrong but this poem was so good I don't really care that there was one mistake
Anywho, great job and keep it up! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!!
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First of all, thank you for entering my contest. I really appreciate it, and I wish you the best!
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Silly....
You spelt "Angel" wrong,
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oh
so sad *runs off to weep in the CB closet*
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... Wow
lol, lost love and a lonely road. I loved teh line a loneley road built for two it worked nicely. Some of the rhymes did seem a little forced, but the emotion and lines of the poem hid that well.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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dang it was sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo beautiful its something like i pictured my self writing for my grandpappy. i loved it so much. of course you know. its ...its ...perfect to the bone
jess
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OH, this was amazing! I can relate to everything portrayed, i loved it! Wow.. just.. ayeyiyi, wow! <3
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wow very sad and intence write I like it so full of emotion. keep up the amazing work your a very talented writer.
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:/ Aw man...that was sad. I'm sorry you lost her. Well, anyway, until most poems that i've read, this one seemed to change direction really fast. Unlike "i loved her and she left" or "i loved her and she stayed" it kept switching back and forth like real life. And the words you used didn't seem fake. I felt full emotion out of it. I felt the loss, the love, the pain, everything. And i thought the writing in general was beautiful. Excellent job, i'll be sure to read more of your poems later. -MK
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Awesome!
Hey. You mentioned this poem to me when you commented, so I decided to read it. I'm glad I did. It's a really great write, so full of emotion and flows beautifully. I love it! Woot!
Shady -
i really like this poem. it is beautifully written.
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beautiful
oh man thats sad. i cant understand we people do this to one another. cant anyone see what they are doing? keep writing, this is beautiful and truth-riddled.
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