(Intro)
I can't replace the pain
That you've thrust into my brain
It's driving me insane and I just can't stand you
You're my enemy
It's too bad that I couldn't see
What you were doing to me but now it's through
(Chorus)
Your my enemy
It all ends tonight
[Out of mind, Out of sight!
I'll be taking you out tonight!]
You're done fucking with me
Can't be aligned with my enemy
[Out of mind, Out of sight!
And it ends for you tonight!]
(Chorus)
(Verse 1)
Trapped inside my mind like an unborn new disease
Slowly opening up and bringing me down / to.. my.. KNEES!
Trickling down my spine as my day comes to an end
You brought me down and now's my time / to make.. you.. BEND.... then BREAK!
(Chorus)
(Verse 2)
The way you make me feel makes me forget your face
All I know is that tonight I'll put / you in your PLACE!
I'll bring you down as hard as you did to me
Infect you with the same disease / just wait.. and.. SEE! ... you'll be as screwed up as ME!
(Chorus)
(Verse 3?)
I let out a primal scream
As I look at my enemy
The one who causes all this pain
The man who makes me feel insane
And I... realize
I'm looking in a mirror
Staring at my reflection
I'm bringing myself down
This wasn't my intention
I slam a fist at the glass
Oblivious to what's inside and
The fact that it is me
And as I bleed...
I retreat...
Author notes
Meant as a song... songs are poetry, are they not?
Mostly fast and angry for the beginning.. and then the end... the end is a bit slower... and more soft-spoken..
[ps - The more I read this.. the more I hate it. Whether it truly is good or bad, it just irritates me a little]
Written November 5th, 2006
A contest entry
- Hate Me, Kill Me by thorlorn thanatos.
380 points, ended March 30, 2007, 102 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Its good :) nice lyrics :)
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I think its a good thing that it makes you angry, thats the emotion its supposed to evoke...correct. great job...I really do like it...its powerful and stronger than a lot of things you write...more like your old stuff. good job.
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I'm sorry to read that this irritates you, because I think it would make an excellent song. As a songwriter, I believe that one mark of good lyrics is being able to hear music in your head as you read them. This piece was like that for me. It has a very strong beat, and could make a really powerful song. I could picture it with heavy guitars and lots of screaming. Heh. I like it.
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