As I run I can hear his footsteps behind me.
He's catching up and I'm unprepared,
just like I knew I would be.
I'm hiding myself, afraid of this test.
He never falters.
He's not like the rest.
He's going to catch me, there's nowhere left to hide.
He's running faster,
with more force behind his stride.
I'm staying in the dark but it doesn't feel right.
At the edge of the woods,
he calls me to come into the light.
I can feel him here now, his breath is on my skin.
But, I'm still scared
because of things that happened back then.
I turned around, ready for a fight
but he put his arms around me
and took away my fright.
He finally caught me, but only wanted my heart.
Now that I've given in,
we'll never be apart.
The moral of my story is, don't be afraid.
If you keep hiding from him,
you might miss a love that would never fade!
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Written November 5th, 2006
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aaaaaaaawwwwwwwwsomeeeee
never in my life have i read such a great piece of poem... a completely different angle of fallin in love.. amazing.... i just cant praise it enough.... i really mean its... just amazing...
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Awwe.
Awwe. Baby, I love it. You are so wonderful. I really appreciate this. You'll never know what you mean to me.
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StarDust23
Hi your poem was awesome and great it was also sad towards the end "he finally caught me, but only wanted my heart." that part touched me i felt like that happened to me before.
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Awesome
I think this is a beautiful poem. You show a lot of strength and that is awesome. I look up to you for that. Take care! Hope everything works out!
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Great job!
This is a very good write!! It kind of givesyou a little bit of a fright at first not knowing where it is going to take you , leaving you grasping onto every word. But as it turns out it is straight into the arms of true love . Letting go of the feeling of being afraid instead the feeling of being totally loves and safe. I like how it flowed all the way through. You did a wonderful jobon this it was actually like reading a story the imagery was superb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Thanks for writing and sharing -
i this that this is pretty good. you do have more talent than i think you realize, only very small things i would have done diffrently myself- but that's just differences in style as far as meter and rhyming- i can be a stickler, personally. the idea is timeless. i also don't know whether you even meant to do this, but i also like that the stanzas are short- it felt so appropriate for the idea of being chased and almost out of breath. i enjoyed it!
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Very Good
Great work. I really liked it and I never comment on anything I do not like as I am not a professional critic. But I like this all the way through. You meshed your thought perfectly. Don't be so hard on yourself. Just remember that any poet that expresses their thought are very special people. They are the thinkers and I just know that you put a lot of thought into writing this. I even liked you ending comment. Keep up the good work, you are better than you realize. I wish you well in all your poetry as well as in your life.
hugs and love
goody two shoes
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